Voices

Voices

A Poem by Kiera Scanlon

Nothing left to do,
But,
Plead, cry, and bleed,
Which is something,
That wasn't meant for me.

I hear voices, 

There's no turning back,
They take my life just like that,
The voices win,
And I struggle,
All because,

I hear voices,

After many empty years,
And a silenced mind
Running on auto,
Now, i'ts my time.
And,

I hear voices,
No more.

© 2014 Kiera Scanlon


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Voices are a pain in the butt. They bother, tease, and more often than not, mislead. What makes it worse is they chatter all the time giving no peace and quiet. Maybe you have discovered this too,but I found that wrting about them, exposing them to the whole world, exposing them to the light of day so all can see their stupidity, shuts them up at least for awhile. I liked your poem Kiera, simply yet poetically expressed. ~~redzone

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Beautiful as always, but you hear enough of that.

Now I'm going to attack your punctuation so brace your ego.
Typo: penultimate stanza i'ts should be it's
In my opinion (which is just my opinion) the two lone "I hear voices," should end in periods and the last "I hear voices, No more." could be "I hear voices no more."
In the first stanza no comma after but.

Generally what I am saying is fewer commas, more periods. True poetry doesn't need to follow grammar rules to the T, but it felt cluttered/jumbled to me. More periods would give it more stability.

Nice repetition of three "I hear voices" with the no more twist at the end.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Voices are a pain in the butt. They bother, tease, and more often than not, mislead. What makes it worse is they chatter all the time giving no peace and quiet. Maybe you have discovered this too,but I found that wrting about them, exposing them to the whole world, exposing them to the light of day so all can see their stupidity, shuts them up at least for awhile. I liked your poem Kiera, simply yet poetically expressed. ~~redzone

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very well written. But let me say, if this is based on your own experiences, i know its hard but dont give up. i get it though. Stay strong. message me if you ever need.

Posted 7 Years Ago


either in actuality or metaphorically this is brilliant and strong short piece. I too would have loved to read more. It has a strong ending but still begs the reader to want more. I love pieces like that. Bravo!

Posted 7 Years Ago


This is an extremely powerful poem. It's realistic and touching. The poem takes something that so many people deal with and makes it known to the audience. And even though the ending is quite sad, that reflects the reality of life. I hope you are just writing this from a creative perspective and haven't felt these ways yourself.

Posted 7 Years Ago


I would've loved this poem to be longer and only because I enjoyed reading it not because it would have greater meaning than it does now. To me, this poem reminds me of addiction.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Multi faceted, meaning meaning things to many people however the gist does make its mark. Good write.


Posted 7 Years Ago


I like your stark presentation of the conflict and the well written rhythm of the poem. I am confused though by the second stanza; it seems to me internally inconsistent because there is no bridge between "There's no turning back... The voices win," and "And I struggle..." Having a turn here feels important as the third stanza resolves the conflict.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Interesting! Some people really do hear unknown voices. Glad you don't hear them anymore. Plead cry and bleed is not meant for anyone. Sorry if you have experienced this! sounds like you are doing better. Writing is a good way to express pain. Love the write!

Posted 7 Years Ago


lord I just talk back and have conversations loved the write the theme of it this seems to be the norm for young people

Posted 7 Years Ago



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Kiera Scanlon

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