Oh, I Thought

Oh, I Thought

A Poem by Lunette Lariz
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I thought, I thought...

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I thought you would be a muse
or perhaps a hero in my piece
I thought you would make use
of an angel instead of beast

Oh, I thought you are a man
with a heart so true and pure
I thought you aren't a gun
nor a disease without a cure

I thought you cannot lie
hurt, or bring me to tears
Oh, you dare to let me die
You are murderous for years 

Oh, I thought you are the one
the man I see in the crystal
I thought you are my sun
but I realized I'm going mental

I thought you're different
with a unique heart and soul
I thought you're real and reverent
but being 'someone' was not your role

I thought you're better than them
who play with our hearts so chaste
Oh, you rudely destroyed a gem
you put my faith in you to waste

A great suppressor, yes you really are
I don't deserve the pain you have brought
I am glad we will be afar
I thought you aren't a murderer! Oh, I thought! 

© 2013 Lunette Lariz


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Sometime our muses can love us or mistreat us. A muse can wear the clothing of a demon or angel? I like your thoughts. Open the door to a long and good conversation. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


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This was unique and quite lovely to read. It had a great flow and was very nicely written. Nice job. x

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sometime our muses can love us or mistreat us. A muse can wear the clothing of a demon or angel? I like your thoughts. Open the door to a long and good conversation. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Well written and reflective...it bites the thought of a reader. I enjoyed this.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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nicely done and expressive

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

your figurative way of looking at things is pretty unique and your use of repetition is pretty nice. The idea you used isn't new but I liked how you newly presented it. Your thoughts are very intriguing and you have risen a reflective questions in my head which is a mark of accomplishment for an author and a reader.

Well done

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Such plentiful thoughts of a person we once loved. Did you tell HIM that? It would have helped but now ... Well conveyed though.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hm, I see that you've evolved through the poem. Mentally. Your telling of the tale changes in tone drastically. I like it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

oh woww..so much depression and frustration expressed in a very nice way..

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Heartache's a b***h. The trouble with people in crystals is they got shot through a woman's vagina into the same fucked up world the rest of us did and are liable to the same faults, fears and temptations we all face. They are all but guaranteed to screw up our fantasies as we are there's. That's the trouble with fantasies. Good poem. Nice rhyming

Posted 11 Years Ago


Honest and Real. Disappointment vented and shared with many who will identify. I could hear the hurt hidden in your misplaced trust.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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