No Off Switch

No Off Switch

A Poem by Invisible Ink

wringing out my sadness
into this notebook I pour, emptiness
bailing out a boat
with no land in sight
drinking from a dry well
thirsty for hope
even to love, yourself, impossible
when days pass, without dawning
silence, becomes music
a song without words on the radio
turn it off

© 2010 Invisible Ink


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Invisible Ink
Please point out any and all errors and feel free to tell me you hate it. Just please please please leave a review. Thank you so much for your time.

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Your imagery is a little typical, but still intense.
//a song without words on the radio
turn it off//
These lines are particularly good. :)
Remember not to confuse your articles: "An dry well" should be "A dry well." You're a little heavy on the commas, but that is excusable using poetic license.
Excellent work.


Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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love it, i think your a great writer

Posted 14 Years Ago


i like this peice full of emotion though it should be a dry well not an, and instead of all the commmas try just droping to the next line and if your trying to show a pause which i feel you were in the line "even to love, yourself, impossible" but still its a great peice just a little touching up and this would really shine keep up the good work

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Your imagery is a little typical, but still intense.
//a song without words on the radio
turn it off//
These lines are particularly good. :)
Remember not to confuse your articles: "An dry well" should be "A dry well." You're a little heavy on the commas, but that is excusable using poetic license.
Excellent work.


Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

again i really like this poem. :] i can't wait to read more of you're poems. i can feel the emotion you want to portray very well

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Added on February 10, 2010
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Invisible Ink
Invisible Ink

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