Blood.

Blood.

A Poem by ♪The Girl Next Door♪
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Please don't judge this piece too harshly...it's comin from a really deep, part of my heart, and I'm going through some tough times right now. Don't judge <3

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it's this feeling that i'm stuck within.

i can't escape.

i don't want to escape.

But I need.

it's dragging me deeper and deeper.

But i CAN'T get free.

shaking and crying.

then sleep it away.

put on a smile:)

maybe it never happened.

but then you see them.

the parts that never go away.

the after math.

BREAK the barriers that keep my heart held down.

the love that needs to be let in

 is reflecting off my encased heart.

FREE my soul,

Let my brain be in control

OF my heart for once.

i feel my body slipping slowly...

my mind and emotions slip faster.

and I feel THE cold creep into my eyes.

the night falls

i see the door...

i've never been so scared

of my own home,

of myself...

of this MONSTER.

believe me when I say it.

for if you move the mountains

guarding my heart

you release the

nightmares INSIDE.

 

© 2012 ♪The Girl Next Door♪


Author's Note

&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;
Hint: Go back nd check all the capital words.

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This is a deep poem and it has a lot of meaning. I really liked the message you put into it. Sometimes the monster inside of us is really hard to get away from. Sometimes it has such a hold on us that it is almost impossible to get away no matter how hard you try. You did such a wonderful job on this. Your heart and soul was put into this and I am glad that I was able to be a part of this. Thank you for giving us such a outstanding poem and a window to get to know what kind of person you are and helping us understand that sometimes we have monsters inside of us that we cant get away from and we shouldn't judge anyone no matter what. Keep up the good work!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.



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I feel like this too sometimes. I won't spout all that 'it'll all pass and everything will go back to rainbows bunnies and butterflies' stuff, cause that is a bit of a lie. Me? I adapt rather easilly, it seems...
Anyways, great piece.
Keep up the great work!

Posted 6 Years Ago


I get it. it's a great piece, very creative, very strong. I'd give it a bit more formatting to make those capitalized words stand out better, but that's just me. It's a great write, and if you ever want to talk hun, you can inbox me. I may not hav the best adive but I've been in this sort of place before and I might be able to help. just stay strong, okay hun?

Posted 6 Years Ago


"huggles you"

Kwenzwie, stay strong

Posted 6 Years Ago


Well done. I liked the hidden words. Keep writing:)

Posted 6 Years Ago


&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;

6 Years Ago

Thanks c:
the best poems are the ones that come from the heart....a beautiful job:):):D

Posted 6 Years Ago


&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;

6 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Wow, a very deep poem that means a lot to you! That's a very self-confidence and leap forward for a writer to post a poem so deep and meaningful to them. A poem filled with raw emotions that capture the reader's attention as their eyes cross by each word and sit astonished by the way your move your words in such creativity. I understand that you're going through a rough time and no one should judge. That'd be wrongful of them to do so. Everyone once in awhile experience bad situations. Then they expect for someone to be there and have the same respect as you had wanted previously. I think that's truly wrong of someone to do. Great job for posting such a deep and heartfelt poem, Makenzie! :)

I did go back and check all of the captialized words and it reminds me a lot like Skillet's hit song "Monster", as Aribiter reviewed and mentioned below. I personally love Skillet and all of their music that they produce. I'm a huge fan! :)

There's nothing to critique too harshly about this, though just remember no matter what kind of mood you're in an "i" is ALWAYS captialized. :)

Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG ;)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the well though out and extremely kind review :) This, like everything else in.. read more
Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect

6 Years Ago

You're very welcome. It's really no problem. I love telling a writer on here what I may or may not l.. read more
This is deep. I like it, it shows much disapari and emotion. Wonderful write.

Posted 6 Years Ago


&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;

6 Years Ago

Thank you very much :)
}Echo{

6 Years Ago

:)
tis fine alright m'lady.

Posted 6 Years Ago


&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;

6 Years Ago

Thank you, kind sir c:
You've obviously gone deep inside yourself to pull out this piece...it would take an awfully cold soul to not feel every ounce of the despair you've implanted into these words...an intense and heart-wrenching work...as with anyone that will read this, I wish you the best.

Posted 6 Years Ago


&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;

6 Years Ago

Thank you for the wonderful review and for caring :)
kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

You're very welcome :)
Wonderful dark and great raw emotions. I get this feeling and i'll be prayin for you

Posted 6 Years Ago


&#9834;The Girl Next Door&#9834;

6 Years Ago

Thanks you :)

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My name's Makenzie and I'm extremely insane. If I were a super hero my super hero name would either be Captain Procrastination or Sarcastimaster. P.S. also by the way, I'm a confessed crazy cat lady. .. more..

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