Fallen angel

Dedicated to Mom & Dad

Your falling teardrop into the torrent ocean tides

Slipping into the turbulent seas the teardrop tells me your story

Yours isn't a trick or a tale of sadness,

but words so painful it bleeds my heart of

its every ounce of regret for never once able to comprehend the vivid colours of your love.

Now I say goodbye to my foolish ways and youthful arrogance

I bid farewell to the heat of impulsion

and drinking exquisite wine for only to devour them in ignorant bliss.

I do not choose a coward's explanation neither will I be charmed by your deceitful lies

Do not say the moments were an imagination

Do not fall into the abyss of hollow rhetoric of religion

Tell me your truths so that I may see your Light.

If you could only see how empty love is without your presence,

if you could recognise the torment of your absence a thousand kisses deep.

I could say 'hello'

but I don't know what else besides the weather we would chat about.

You did not depart

but I left with a sword of bitterness

that cut the ties that is now butchered of any love.

I pine for you yet I despise you for the emptiness you made me feel.

The depth of your angelic pride is the fortress you have built to exclude me,

yet you betray yourself a thousand kisses deep.

We will walk together again someday

towards different paths by the same brook that gave birth to Life.

Your hand in mine with a knowing smile inside.

 

Reviews

[Liderien]

I can relate to this poem very much. I can see the struggle back in forth between forgiveness and accountability. It feels like torment, and I know it to be torment.
We want the people in our lives to recognize their wrongs so that we can fully move on not because we want to punish them. But yet we long for the relationship to be right. very powerful.

[Ruth]

The severedness and then the reconnection is so beautifully portrayed here sweety:)
A poignant and moving poem, really well written
xx

[yo]

Very well done, spoken from the vigor of the heart yet has a calm and mature feel. Enjoyed it line by line! Fantastic!

Gus O.

[Snuggles McClintock]

i am thinking that I like this piece. i am big into the theme of bitter farewells, but this one has a peaceful tone. You used the phrase: a thousand kisses deep twice. I wasn't sure if you were using this as a device. I would recommend replacing one of them. Otherwise, good write Martin!

[Bud]

I simply can't imagine a piece of poetry being any more open, personal, honest, emotionally charged, captivating to the reader, heart wrenching, tear and thought provoking. Neither can I see one being more Outstandingly Magnificent with a Powerful presence in the mind, heart, and soul of the reader. This is absolute Excellence in my opinion. You very much place a perfect harmony in this piece with your Talented and equally Astonishing ability to express yourself with an exacting means. Without doubt one of the Finest I have ever read. A standing ovation is in order here! Many applauds to you!

[sealass]

"We will walk together again someday

towards different paths by the same brook that gave birth to Life.

Your hand in mine with a knowing smile inside" �

brilliant theme of togetherness and apart-ness at the same time:)
well articulated...spoken from the heart and depths of a boy now man.

[Pink Butterfly]

Powerful poem!!!! well-crafted indeed!!!!
God bless you!

-Pink Butterfly-

[An owl on the moon]

So beautifully bittersweet, with depths of darkness and hope mingled and flowing together. What a powerfully vivid, moving display of life and love...

[J Carly]

Wow. This was amazing. The depth of emotions displayed in this piece took my breath away. I only pray that you can work out your differences with one another and the angel can rise again, if only half as high. Well done.

[Tate Morgan]

Your best work so far
tate