Us

Will We together? I answer...

You Ask ....

You say you will be with me in darkness?
 
But what if times get bad and we can’t be?
Will we break all the rules just to be?
Walking alone with you by my side would make the darkness go away?
Can we make it worlds apart?

Can you always be true to me?


I Answer...

Piling up all against us,
Is world apart,
Plotting all against us
To keep us apart.

Darkness will be for eternity,
Nothing we can do to change it,
Never said that Walking with you will make the darkness go away,
but We'll never be alone and we will make it.

So much against us,
So little to be with,
But hope is a wonderful thing for us,
So much to live with.

I will break the rules,
I will bend the roads,
I'll conquer the mountains,
We will Make it

My word is my soul,
And My soul is you,
No one lives without a soul,
And I can't live without you.
 

Author's Note

An answer for my love's question...

Reviews

[Imperfection]

First of all, I like the format...beginning with uncertainty, too many questions, strong words of doubt and then going on to reveal the answers.

Never said that Walking with you will make the darkness go away,
but We'll never be alone and we will make it.
- I like these lines best.


I also like the title. A single word, revealing nothing by itself. Open to interpretation. But now that I have gone through the entire piece a couple of times, I know what a befitting title that is.

Actually this poem is so much reflective of you and your stance towards life. High spirited, positive, never-say-die atttude -- all put together into this poem. That is my unbiased opinion on this piece.

But personally I like the questions here better than the answers. Certainly because I identify more with that part of the poem. The answers you give here gives rise to some questions in my mind but the questions in your poem is what I find more comforting, more real...

And the ending, I agree with Bhavya, though hard to take is perhaps the best part of the poem.

[Starting Over]

Still my fav!

[Starting Over]

No matter how many times i read this! I always love it! I love you also!!!!

[leaving]

Awe its beautiful... my sister does talk about you alot... lol...

[lAcEy_LoO's Poems Site]

My word is my soul,
And My soul is you,
No one lives without a soul,
And I can't live without you.

Same to you love.... wishing you were here

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Wow! This is simply great,
I loved it as a whole! from start to the end. It is simply amazing!
I specially loved the ending lines which gave a beautiful feel to the poem.
Great work!

[lAcEy_LoO's Poems Site]

I love you and we will get through this

[lAcEy_LoO's Poems Site]

I love it even more this time!!!