With Me

i wrote this for some one special

I want you to feel my love,

To know how I feel about you.

I could offer you so much,

All you have to do is say yes.

When the shadow arise and you feel alone,

Just remember I’m there for you.

I will protect you from every thing.

I would go hungry

Just so you could eat.

I would die

Just so you could live.

When we are apart just look up,

No matter how far we are apart

I will be close to you.

Reviews

[Steph K]

"I would go hungry Just so you could eat." Sacrifice and love are often intertwined and this is an amazing depicition of it. Your work is clear, concise and dare I say to the point but that is the element which forms the uniqueness of your personal style. In short, this is a great piece.

[Larry Dyson]

and special they are...

[shadow night]

yeah at the time me and my fiance was far apart i was in new jersey and she was in kentucky now im in ohio and hses in kentucky still but i loove her a lote so it was easy

[LetMeLaughLetMeSing]

That's so sweet! A wonderful write.

[Dragon]

Aww. This is so sweet and many people can relate to this. I like the words you used to form this amazing poem and the structure is great. Hope you keep on writing because this here is great. Awesome write. :)

[DontBlink158]

I love this!! you could feel the love pouring out of the words!! you crafted the words in just the right way to make you sigh wishing someone would have that love for you. this was a great write!!!!!!!!

[RedInk524]

A lot of passion, almost obsessive. But then again love is a form of obsession just as genius is a form of insanity. I like it, the strength in it really shows.

[Coffee Vampier]

it is very sweet :)

[Jeremy Baker]

Passionate and with a structural strength I really like - great work!

[Roze Collions]

once agian kairi is right it is cute and i love it u should give this to that someone special