If I Gave My Heart Away Do I Get It Back?

If I Gave My Heart Away Do I Get It Back?

A Poem by Sara
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I was in a great relationship but the long distance was hard on him and even though we loved each other we couldn't make it work and I got hurt

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When you are happy 
When everything seems okay
Your at your most vulnerable
Because that feeling will never stay

When you feel on top of the world
And your heart jumps for joy
That world is just a slip from the end
And it can be ruined by a simple boy

Well he's not really simple
And not just a boy
This was the one I'd do anything for
The one that I completely adore

And it's over, he's now just a friend
And being just that the pain will never end
So when I have no heart because I gave it away
Will I ever love anyone else again
I'd rather not say

© 2010 Sara


Author's Note

Sara
Ignore the grammatic errors and that there isn't punctuation. How can this be improved?

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According to me, poems are better when grammar is ignored... But punctuation can do wonders... It can be a way of expression... Ignoring both aspects as u said this is an emotionally well built work.. With lots of aggressive personal touch to it.. Keep writing more..

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Really nice! I agree with the previous review, poetry and grammar don't always have to mix!

Posted 9 Years Ago


According to me, poems are better when grammar is ignored... But punctuation can do wonders... It can be a way of expression... Ignoring both aspects as u said this is an emotionally well built work.. With lots of aggressive personal touch to it.. Keep writing more..

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chika go with your own thing. But anywho this is really awesome :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Sara

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