CRY!

A look at that intimate moment when we show people true emotion.

Crisp rims have fallen victim to tears that sooth pain,

Moving skin tells tales to those waiting in silence,

Thin lashes look darker in a time of moisture and emotion,

Shaking departure of skittish men an uneasy alliance.

 

A tiny finger is all that guards ones face against the world,

Brushing droplets way on cheeks now pink and heated,

Thoughts bounce forth to make us fight or recoil,

Daring taunts have pierced scowls and tension repeated.

 

Crow’s feet stay covered and magnified at the same time,

There the eyes now punish the sky by opening to fast,

Green lights pour forth into minds around you my dear,

No more tears to cry tonight no more binging in cast.

Author's Note

Honesty.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"Thin lashes look darker in a time of moisture and emotion,

Shaking departure of skittish men an uneasy alliance.



A tiny finger is all that guards ones face against the world,

Brushing droplets way on cheeks now pink and heated,"
All the lines are good in this poem and all the expressions are wonderful. I agree with Chris a lot on his point...Marvelous work....:)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)

[Sasha]

wow .. this is amazing !
loved it!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you Sasha.

[Arabdha]

Its absolutely wonderful to see how much imagery is here - you definitely are a keen observer !

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you pet!

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

Most people see tears as a source of pointless annoyance. I really liked your successful efforts to make tears seem so important and descriptive.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

thank you

[Rene Velez]

great images, I enjoyed this one a lot, the flow, the way the words follow after one another, a poem should roll off the tongue when saying it, like a melody with no instruments, only a handful can do that. nice work.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you x

[Coyote Poetry]

You are amazing writer. Your poetry is alive and real. I like the use of language leading the reader to places where secret and thoughts are hidden. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you x

[unsavable_soul]

Honesty is i loved it,
The whole thing as usual exudes your sensual and romantic talents. I bet even a hate piece from you would feel seductive like a knife in the back. I think you have a way with words and this piece makes me ache. A little confused how else I was to experience the piece. The only actual complaint was that I have never heard the term "binging in cast" you use at your end.
Sincerely
Christopher
100/100

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you my darling, that is suppose to be "binding in cast" I'll change it, thank you! x

[unsavable_soul]

Oh, got it.
Most welcome, you write it and deserve it.
Chris

[Sleepless]

honesty can hurt but can relieve the feeling of bottling up white lies :) i love it !
i like these lines
Green lights pour forth into minds around you my dear,

No more tears to cry tonight no more binging in cast.

[David Scott]

How seldom do we let the tears fall so we may taste them and feel the completion of their work as they drip off the cold flesh of our blushing sorrow?
I fear too often we do sheepishly wipe the tears away.
Does anybody want to see those tears? Only to hurt us further in most cases...
I shall search the bosom where my tears shall safely fall.
Inspirational!

[Baby Ricochet]

One of my philosophies on writing poetry is the line and there's several great lines in this like "Moving skin tells tales of those waiting in silence." and Thoughts bounce forth to make us fight or recoil."
Strong together it tells a story and taken apart every line makes a statement. Outstanding work Sir!!

[Dayran]

You're spending too much time in front of the mirror Thomas, but the rewards of insight into the nature of man's condition is enlightening. A nice one.