Rough Ideas.

Rough Ideas.

A Poem by Thomas Fitzgerald
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An ode to suicide!

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To slit thy wrists,
To hang by ropes,
To swallow thy pills,
To blemish all hopes,
A tear from an eye,
A pain in thy back,
A stab to the heart,
A world that is black,
The coffins gone down,
The spirit is lifted,
The gun has gone silent,
The stomach has twisted,
A family in mourning,
An answer not there,
A goodbye not said,
A death unfair.

© 2011 Thomas Fitzgerald


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The poem told a true story. When no note is left. Leave a lot of questions and sadness. The poem was direct and strong. Thank you for the powerful poem with a sad story. A excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


wow. This is really good x

Posted 12 Years Ago


very innovative!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Usually I think rhyming poems take away the seriousness of the message behind the poem, but you've done a brilliant job of rhyming whilst talking about suicide.
I also like the way you haven't really separated the poem into stanzas, but instead you've started every four lines with either 'a' or 't'.
Great job

Posted 12 Years Ago


a dark look at a dark subject.
it's a well-tuned, lashing piece.

i've always liked dorothy parker's black-humored suicide poem, resume.'

Posted 12 Years Ago


great write here,
ireland has a huge suicide rate.....

Posted 12 Years Ago


This fits in with my last couple of days. We lost a loved one yesterday, in a car accident. He was my neice's 24 yr. old son. A family in mourning

Posted 12 Years Ago


Normally I won't even look at suicide poems. I feel like a lot of people glamorize it and I never really understood why. Subject matter aside the poem is very tight as I would expect from you. It's a solid write that get's it's point across

Posted 12 Years Ago


WOW! This has some impact! dark, somber and riveting! Terse sentences and a tight rhyme scheme kept it edgy all the way through. Well done!

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Thomas Fitzgerald
Thomas Fitzgerald

Wexford, Leinster, Ireland



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