Let The Big Kids Play

Hey there, kid

I know that you're scared

you're actin' all brave

but the fear is still there.

 

You're talking big

like you know what you're sayin'

but I know that you're lyin'

'Cuz I'm seeing you shakin'.

 

Hey there, kid

there's no time for pretend

move outta' the way

or grow up and get in.

 

These toys ain't for kids

so decide today

'Cuz it's time to shove out

and let the big kids play.

Author's Note

Correct, criticize, advise! Tell me what you think! :D

Reviews

[twain]

Very interesting thing you've done here, espcially the voice which I picked up right away, Loved it Kaitlyn.

[Decanter Red]

Oh ho ho! There's a kid who can't keep his hands to himself, eh? We need to shove him back to his mama's cradle! XD

Good style and adopting the right voice and tone to your poetry. This is important, because such a poem, if you used a gentle voice to it, might turn out to be:

1. Different but in a good way,if you handled it well
2. Really awkward if you didn't handle it well.

I really don't know what to say, you got me laughing all over the floor. I like its simplicity, and how you said 'big kids', yet straightforward that you got to the point even when it's so short. Now, it's time to shove the little kids out of my backyard, hahaha!

[Kaitlyn]

:D
I'm glad you found some humor in it! Not many people do!

You're right. I re-read over this, trying to imagine it written in a softer voice, and it changed the undertone so drastically it seemed like a different poem entirely!

The idea for this poem actually came from a friend of mine in the military. We were talking about some of the recruits going through training. He chuckled and told me that some of them were like little kids, and that they either needed to grow up or get out of the park, because the big kids were playing.

Anyway, thanks for the read : )

[Decanter Red]

Hahaha, that's one funny tale! And you're welcome :)

[Distant horizons]

Kids can be so awful to each other can't they? I wonder where they get it from. methinks they see a little too much real life way to soon. We are after all, meant to be role models for them, so no real surprise they can be nasty too. Nicely done Kaitlyn

[Kaitlyn]

:)

Thank you.

And I think that you're right. Reality hits hard. And for a kid it can be even harder.