The Fall

Brown leaves
Cool winds
School starts
And doesn't end
Bell rings
Next class
Boy the day goes by real fast
Leaves fall
Trees bare
People have to stop and stare
Natures wonders all about
What a way to lay around
Lie in the grass
Watching the clouds
You know the fall is not that loud

Reviews

[Alexa Aiden]

Oh this is great! The last three lines are the best! It's a very warm poem. It makes me want to lie in the grass and watch the clouds. I can picture the Autums leaves falling! :D

[Tim]

The fall is not loud but one of my favorite seasons as it is for many. Nice job on this.

[scatterbrain]

this is the first time i've rated a story on this website. 95/100

wow. this really reminds me of some Perks of Being a Wallflower poem, or something of Shel Silverstein. this is great! there are a few places where i'd change a few tiny words, but... this is great! nothing more needs to be said....

but!
this seems like such a "You and I are gonna be friends" by the White Stripes! sort of an easy-going voice, but the song is much longer than your poem, lyrics-wise. here's the song:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IZGHTkmhxgQ

good luck girl :D

[kuru]

this is really good...you gotta nice flow going on here...keep it up!

[deeps]

Lie in the grass
Watching the clouds
You know the fall is not that loud

I So-Loved this part, makes me want to go do that.
Wonderful & lovely write. So hopeful