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A Poem by Komichi


            Longing for him
            One that I haven't met yet
            Vibration of tides
            Endears him more in the imagination


            Lucky I am
            On the ground, I found
            Vivid green four-leaf-clover
            Enlarges my expectation


            Lost in daydreams
            Octet echoes in the light
            Vibrant notes in the sky
            Encourage me to take a step


            Love, my love
            Only if you were with me
            Virtual moments will no longer last
            Every sparkle will become true


            Longest time, have I waited

            One stands with me face to face
            Vows in silence, no words spoken

            Engage our time for a moment and forever

© 2008 Komichi

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Great content...a bit choppy with the flow/rhythm. Overall good job!

Posted 14 Years Ago

Wow! I really enjoyed this! Good work!

Posted 14 Years Ago

You've tackled a very dangerous subject here. Love and lust is hard to get right because so many people do it and everything seems cliche. However I think you've done well. For a genre that's everyone's first port of call you have made it rather different and conjoured some decent little vibrations in my mind-tank. I like it a lot. Keep 'em coming.

Posted 14 Years Ago

It's not the most amazing poem but it is decent. Play with your words and maybe you'll stumble across something that's better.

Posted 14 Years Ago

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4 Reviews
Added on August 13, 2008
Last Updated on August 14, 2008



Los Angeles, CA

Beginning writer. English is my second language, and I am trying to explore the joy of English literature. more..

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A Poem by Komichi