On the brink.

On the brink.

A Poem by Samantha Koshiol
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Capturing the anxious feeling of progression.

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Broken toed.

Not sure if they were stepped on or if I walked too far again.

Sometimes I go until they're numb.

Freed.

Roam.

Moving to the simplicity of my thoughts.

Soundless with my ears ringing.

Recalling who's and what's.

Mellow.

Questioning.

Step by step with head down.

Calculating locations and mapping destinations.

Spotting landmarks and road signs.

Stop.

Yeild.

Think.

Do.

Act fast. There's traffic coming.

They're dependent on your move.

You have blinkers for a reason, please use them.

Decide.

Chose.

Left or right.

You've hit a t and have no straight-forward option.

Should have contemplated already.

Hurry!

Now!

MOVE!

Run!

Drive!

Speed!

Fly!

FLEET!

Leave this place in the dust.

You've got plenty ahead.

Make your mark.

Leave.

Go.

Now.

GO!

Your chance is eclipsing.

Rising and tempting.

Take it and never look back.


© 2012 Samantha Koshiol


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Optimistically, I'd believe that this is the very reason why we should all move forward with our lives and not care about others!
Unfortunately though, I am no optimist. Not even close.

Well, the way I see it, and I am not sure if you attempted to portray it this way, but: I'm not sure why, but this strikes me off as some kind of vicious cycle of ups and downs. We know what's ahead, either emptiness or bliss or some other obstacle meant to downgrade us (which they do!), yet we proceed nonetheless. How often have we wandered about in endless circles, looking to arrive at a place we've no idea about? Beautiful. Well done.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Samantha Koshiol

8 Years Ago

You hit the nail dead on. Life is a rollercoaster and we just strap ourselves in with the idea of ma.. read more



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I like the frantic pace of this...that whole DECIDE NOW vibe...admittedly, I panic when faced with those decisions and, it's no small wonder I have never been hit by a car, literally OR figuratively. It's a little overwhelming, and disjointed, and stream of conscious-ish (I know, not a word; keep it moving, sister, nothing to see here...)...like those small snippets of internal dialogue we have with ourselves, all day every day..."You have blinkers for a reason; please use them..." I really enjoyed this piece and I look forward to reading so much more of your work. Thank you so much for the friend request.

p.s. Say hello to Lucas Davenport for me if you happen to see him running around St. Paul ;-)

-kimmer

Posted 8 Years Ago


You have blinkers for a reason,
please use them.
A nice write and concept.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Optimistically, I'd believe that this is the very reason why we should all move forward with our lives and not care about others!
Unfortunately though, I am no optimist. Not even close.

Well, the way I see it, and I am not sure if you attempted to portray it this way, but: I'm not sure why, but this strikes me off as some kind of vicious cycle of ups and downs. We know what's ahead, either emptiness or bliss or some other obstacle meant to downgrade us (which they do!), yet we proceed nonetheless. How often have we wandered about in endless circles, looking to arrive at a place we've no idea about? Beautiful. Well done.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Samantha Koshiol

8 Years Ago

You hit the nail dead on. Life is a rollercoaster and we just strap ourselves in with the idea of ma.. read more

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Samantha Koshiol
Samantha Koshiol

Born in St. Paul, but proud Sicilian., MN



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This St. Paul native, finds herself crazy. I was once told: "Everyone is crazy, those who admit they are, are. Those in denial are the ones we should be worried about" more..

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