The hottest of the passions

experimental

Cerebral masochism 

Transformed into volition

Pure seduction is my defeat

Tight is my grip, as my hand

Slides down the silver blade

Absolute pursuit 

Drop by rosy drop

The Devils voice sends forth

Scarlet in flames to shed

Cursive over my skin 

Expression in play

'Release and cast out 

My burdening soul for

The hottest of the passions' 

Author's Note

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[Joℏn / Jack / Turtle ..]

Love the rhyme absolute pursuit. Lots of good language here and the last sentence is powerful. I would find alternate phrasing for "hottest" and "Devils"

[Trigorin]

Pretty good, but don't you think it stops somewhat abruptly? I feel like this happens a lot with your poems, you quit right when (to me) it seems like you've only just begun.

[Deeper La'jik]

Thank you for the insight, I still need to work on this more but I just wanted to throw this up