Surrounded by so many yet so alone

Surrounded by so many yet so alone

A Poem by Kshitij Gupta

Surrounded by so many yet so alone,
For they've never really been there when you need them, 
They expect you to be by their side in their moments of mayhem.

"What happened?",they ask
"Is everything okay?",they ask
But they never bother to see beyond the mask, 
They fail to see beyond the fake smile and the momentary laugh, 
They have always seen your sane half.
Everything they think they see,
Isn't everything there is to you. 

They don't care,they don't have time to spare,
They don't see you sigh,they don't see you cry,
They don't see you frown,they don't see you falling down, 
They really don't care,they don't have time to spare. 

Friends is what they call themselves,
They vow to stand by your side,
But leave your back when life begins to slide. 

No matter how many of them you've known,
At the end of the day,surrounded by so many yet so alone.

© 2015 Kshitij Gupta


Author's Note

Kshitij Gupta
Poem the first haha.
PS: A few lines kinda sound more depressing than they actually are.

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Einstein said something like "It's strange to be so well known and yet to feel so alone." I particularly like the repetition of the first line in the last line. I also really like your idea of the sane side; it takes a special kind of friend to share the insane side with.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Kshitij Gupta

8 Years Ago

Oh well I wasn't aware of that wow!
Thanks for passing by :)



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Those are not friends then, I know from personal experience:(
Well penned! Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

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Posted 8 Years Ago


awesome start...so very true how you realize who your true friend are when your down and need a help in hand!!

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Kshitij Gupta

8 Years Ago

Yes indeed. Thank you :)
This represents so many peoples' lives; I feel that you definitely brought to life the emotions running high for the average person in this cruel world. Wonderful piece!

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Posted 8 Years Ago


great start Kshitij and you're right you don't know who to trust and rely on till you need them, then you find out, a very good beginning, i foresee great things from you :)

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Kshitij Gupta

8 Years Ago

Thanks Richard :'D
a touching write,and sadly it`s very true

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Posted 8 Years Ago


Awesome first poem! As long as you are writing what you feel... passionate about it then it's honest and it doesn't matter who likes it.. as long as you do there will be people that understand your words and some that disagree... I liked it... good work!

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Posted 8 Years Ago


For your first ever attempt this says you have a feeling for writing and taking a subject and all of its emotion and expressing it. Rhyming poetry is not the only form and at times people force the poem to the rhyme which lessens the beauty of the piece. Try free verse which is like speaking but also has a 'melody' but does not demand rhyme.

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Posted 8 Years Ago


Kshitij Gupta

8 Years Ago

Yes, but I don't think I have what it takes to write it in free verse. It'd be pretty hard to make i.. read more
John Alexander McFadyen

8 Years Ago

No free verse is like normal speech but with a rhythm. Just try and see what happens.
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i know the feeling

But i have known friends that read the air around me and run to my rescue
Loyal as a partner yet i was never for anyone

Good write
I would say it could apply to some people who claim they love me
And i am not sure about that

Great work here

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Nicely written! I enjoyed it.

- Brittney

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Posted 8 Years Ago


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Kshitij Gupta

8 Years Ago

Thank you Brittney!
613

8 Years Ago

Sure thing!
You find out who your real friends are when you are down.
your poem progresses well however,
in stanzas two and three there is to much repetition of phrases these stanzas need rearrangement.
I can see the effort that you put into this poem. B+

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Posted 8 Years Ago


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Kshitij Gupta

8 Years Ago

Yes, you're right, I still haven't found any though.
Hmm I guess you're referring to the firs.. read more

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Added on April 21, 2015
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Tags: Life, Bitter Truth, Friends, All Alone

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