White Lies

White Lies

A Poem by Kshitij Gupta

He didn't bother trying for her,
For he did not expect her to love him as such.

When she told him,
He fell for it,and he fell hard.
Heart beat faster,
Mind stumbled like a pack of cards.

She said she loved him,
He mattered to her most,
White lies is all she ever told,
White lies that left him cold.

"I never loved you", she blurts,
She has no idea how much it hurts,
She says she wants to be friends,
For this has been the new trend-
Befriend someone whose broken heart you can't mend.

White lies is all she ever told,
White lies he believed.
White lies is all she ever told,
White lies that left him cold.

© 2015 Kshitij Gupta


Author's Note

Kshitij Gupta
Poem the second.
PS: A few lines kinda sound more depressing than they actually are.

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Strong message here. Would be interesting for you to explore the phrase itself, 'white lie', keeping in mind blackness/emptiness etc. As it stands though, I love how lines from midway in the poem are repeated in your final stanza. It adds a real weight and significance to them. Great stuff, keep it up!

Posted 8 Years Ago


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I can relate to this poem, it captures the feeling well.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kshitij Gupta

8 Years Ago

Yes, thank you :)
I am not the best for critiquing poems as they are out of my realm. But I can say this is a poem a lot of people can relate too.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kshitij Gupta

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much :)
This is pretty good! My only comment is that there is a lot of pronouns. I would work on finding other ways to write the lines without using so many pronouns.. but that can be difficult. Very good though, keep it up

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kshitij Gupta

8 Years Ago

Ah thanks a lot, I'll try to improve upon it in my next poem.
Sydney

8 Years Ago

I think my poem "Gunfire" relates to this, you should check is out :)
Wow! Strong for only your second one. Loved it!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Kshitij Gupta

8 Years Ago

Thank you ^_^
No jitters for you. Strong second addition. Good luck on number 3


Posted 8 Years Ago


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Kshitij Gupta

8 Years Ago

Thanks a lot :)
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This poem was written so well. This actually reminds me of a friend I used to have; kind of sad.

- Brittney

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Kshitij Gupta

8 Years Ago

Thanks. Yes,it is depressing indeed.
613

8 Years Ago

You're welcome.

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Added on April 27, 2015
Last Updated on August 29, 2015
Tags: Love, Heartbreak, Betrayal, Lies, White

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Kshitij Gupta
Kshitij Gupta

Doha, Doha, Qatar



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