First Kiss

First Kiss

A Poem by Kyle

First kiss

 

 

Eyes

Meet

Glances

Exchange

 

Words

Unspoken

Feelings

Ablaze

 

Hands

Lock

Fingers

Together

 

Eyes

Close

Mind

Racing

 

Touch

Light

Heart

Pounding

 

Bodies

Close

Trembling

Shaking

 

Lips

Touch

Soft

Exhilarating

 

 

 

© 2008 Kyle


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wait was it rlly like that? lol :] It sucks I can't remember but you can ;.;

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aw, how sweet. This was short and sweet. I liked it, a lot. Great write. :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


wow i loved this!
"Lips
Touch
Soft
Exhilarating"

my favorite line! You did really nice on this.

Posted 13 Years Ago


"Words
Unspoken
Feelings
Ablaze"

I love this line! This whole poem has so much emotion. Since I read the first stanza I couldn't keep my eyes off of it. I love it!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very unique composition. A really good read

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is a great poem. i really like it. great work.

Posted 13 Years Ago


vrry nice. just one question how would u now tht? just wondering. lol =)~
keap up the great work

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very intimate. My first thoughts when I saw the title was 'Oh no, not another one' but you proved me

wrong! I love the way the stanzas are formed. You should try to put this into a Haiku. My favourite stanza:

"Words
Unspoken
Feelings
Ablaze"

So much power in those twenty four little letters...

Posted 13 Years Ago


i really dig this, i like the one worded sentence sometimes going together etc, if i could make a suggestion it would be to change the last word to exhilaration instead of exhilarating because it sounds more poetic
"lips touch soft exhilaration"
rather than ending it with a verb end it with a noun :P
great work, keep it up

Posted 13 Years Ago


It seems almost like an acrostic poem... except it doesn't spell anything. I don't know how you did it using 1-worded lines.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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