CLICHES ATE MY HOMEWORK

07 22 11

Paper dolls of poorly-hewn solar patchworks
scrunch sadistically (indifferently) beneath
a drowsy main course of crunchy handwriting
cached in a honey garlic coat of
canon-friendly anecdotes and answers

Eyes and ears crash the floodgates of foreheads
like a silent auction riot for the best seats in
the amphitheater of scholastic mandates

The main event the quiet one's
vocal airbrush taming of a most
surrepititious epitaph

(Disregard him like a dying ripple
or promote him to a b*****d butler
for the Element quadruplets
parents of all history assumed
godparents of all history the future will exhume)

Letters climb in time proportionate
to the ascending accolades for the acoustics
in proportion to laments on the red performer's
sinking opportunity to tune his spirit
and remix an elementally eternal either/or

Reviews

[B-poet]

Very well done. I love the complex rhyming scheme and meanings within the messages of your rhyming poem. Very well pinned. Man keep that up. I know their are some hungry publishers out there waiting for more of you got to offer. Great work. :)

[kublakhan27]

Thanks very much :) I haven't found the hungry ones yet but I'll keep looking lol

[afra]

haha cute and i enjoyed it so much ...thanks for sharing this

[kublakhan27]

No problem :)

[Destinyxi]

My dog ate mine ;) haha. Great poem steve :)

[kublakhan27]

Haha :P Glad you like it Kels :)

[The Random Writings Of ..]

I have to say the words here are rather, I am not sure what is the word I am looking for :). I like the write, it is all over the place, but in a good way, like a mind gone made. Not sure if that's what you were going for, but it had my mind racing for sure. I do like the descriptions, vivid as always, and yes word choice again not sure how to describe. I read down below that you were maybe struggling with writers block? Well you sure seem to have overcome it here :) Thank you for sharing!

[kublakhan27]

Thank you, I'm glad you like it :) It's a little over a year old now and I fighting the block at the time, and it did help me break out a bit...as for this poem itself, the response has been pretty mixed, but you can't win em' all I guess lol Again, thanks for the compliments :)

[The Random Writings Of Me..Kates]

Again you are very welcome! Your writing is always a welcome site in my inbox :)

[kublakhan27]

Thank you so much...I've been a little down lately, so hearing that means a lot :)

[The Random Writings Of Me..Kates]

I feel you on the down part, anything you want me to read, send away! I get a lot of read requests so you can send me a message to get to it faster :) For you I would not mind :) Head up and keep writing!!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much, that means a lot :) I'm sure there are I few decent ones I can send over lol :)

[Androglossia]

The manifestation of the infamous inability to form an idea or a context? Block? You admitted to have been there presently but this doesn't seem to prove it, lol. As writers always write, divine inspiration always manifests. The body burns out so as the brain. Could it be called an inability then? Or the divine exhaustion? =D Nice write.

[Androglossia]

I realized this was written long ago but not going to delete my comment:)

[kublakhan27]

Haha thank you, and that's ok, I value all your comments :) I regret sending this out as a RR now though...I'm a very defensive and insecure person, and I'm very selective with my RR's for that reason. I'm glad you were still able to like it though :) Mind you, it will likely be crossed off my shortlist of submission candidates to publications lol

[Androglossia]

Insecure seems to be an inappropriate term, lol. We write whatever comes to the mind and we write to give justice to our thoughts and not for the thoughts of other people, yes? Other's thoughts though, not related to ours, become significant as they become an audience of our accomplishments. But still everything we write is our point of view thus insecurity is not applicable. I though, copper skinned, is never insecure. So don't be. I like this write.

[kublakhan27]

Yes it does, but I really have felt that way for a long time...I can't explain it...but your encouragement certainly helps :)

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

I tried... I really, really did. I struggled with saying something like, "I'm sorry. I failed Entrails Reading class." Then the last five lines whispered a rhyme... something about time and then I surmised it to be a form of message-in-a-bottle, cast adrift upon a sea of words in the hope that someone would mark the authors delicate situation and send rescue.

I have to hand it to you... while I have no clue what it is, I do recognize it as one magnificent pile of words. Nicely done! :)

[kublakhan27]

Thank you^^

[Admiral Kirk]

Heh, awesome imagery. :P It's ingenious. I like the flow, it works really well. The poem feels sort of dark as well. Good job! :)

[kublakhan27]

Many thanks :D

[Admiral Kirk]

You're welcome. :)