I LOST A WINDOW

I LOST A WINDOW

A Poem by kublakhan27
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I found a window in the rain
but I had to redefine the sky.
I found the answer in a bag
but despondency I had to buy
with the sense I culled from drawn
infinities erased by dawn.

A window, an answer,
the clarity of a cancer.

I found the nightgowned elder May
dabbing garden green with yellow sponge
of dandelions; ailing May's
sacrament of season will expunge
any scraps of monotone
eye time. My time. I should have known

the almanac I wrote would long
not to be the poster of descent,
and would besmear the writer's wrong
scenes of coal-shaped clouds in what was meant
clandestinely to protect
the window I alone detect.

A dasher, a dancer,
a June bug's sick romancer.

I contemplated greenhouse life:
give the sun to me and I will peel
the skin of heat off while it's ripe,
leaving yellow blindness for its reel
to the rhythm of the time
that matters. Ours? A gofer's rhyme.

A rover turned gofer,
indifferent interloper.

The seasons in my morning tea
on the morrow will be spit out, not
to nurse my timid tongue's "esprit"
from the cower of some inky blot
to the velvet threads of voice -
I'd rather spike the very choice -

but rather to allot a choke
with the room to paint a cynic wince
with regurgitation's slick yolk.
I'll then be a chicken, wont to mince
all the words I long to flame
with the flare bullet of my name.

Window, answer,
sick romancer.
Pane of reason,
calender treason.

© 2012 kublakhan27


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I felt every emotion and feeling! WONDERFUL write! 100/100

Posted 6 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much :D
Katerina

6 Years Ago

Ur welcome! :D
Wow.... amazing... Love it.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Ella

6 Years Ago

Welcome :)
this an incredible work

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Thanks very much^^
this is amazing

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Thanks so much^^
I like this

Posted 6 Years Ago


kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Thank you^^
Emphatic and great rhyming scheme. Whatever inspired you to write this. Keep referring to that source. It's one of your best to date.

Posted 6 Years Ago


kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Thanks so much :) The first two lines were in my head for the longest time and a recent bout of mel.. read more
You rule at this, I am in awe at your ability. The rhythm and rhyme are pitch perfect.

Posted 6 Years Ago


kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Thanks so much^^
i loved the first stanza ....and overall the poem was good ....well done

Posted 6 Years Ago


kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Thank you^^
Ambiguous, mysterious. A rather interesting web of concepts you create here.

The seasons in my morning tea
on the morrow will be spit out, not
to nurse my timid tongue's "esprit"
from the cower of some inky blot
to the velvet threads of voice -
I'd rather spike the very choice -

I very much rather like that stanza I copied/pasted right up there. It made me smile :). your word choice and the ones you pair together never cease to amaze me :D great work as usual!

Posted 6 Years Ago


kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Thank you as always :D This one basically became all about the flow eventually, and i was determine.. read more
quixotic_rose

6 Years Ago

oh, you def got the creative down and the meter. flows a little edgy but its nothing very perceptibl.. read more
kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

:D
I have read this poem four times now in less than 20 mminutes here at the office while doing my paperworks trying to capture its very essence but it eventually gave me a headache. The poems delivers ambiguity. Although self reflection or some emotion is clearly present, in some way it isn't immediately apparent in the lines. Since the information or the story is vague it is difficult to form any interpretation at the desired level of specificity.

But I understand that sometimes, the mind is overloaded with thoughts, interlacing thoughts, images, overflowing ideas that could result a piece that depends solely on intrinsic form rather than on narrative content or imagery.

I've made poems like this. And after we finish the piece, we are released from abstract and annoying thoughts.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Mary Ann M.

6 Years Ago

Lol, don't be. I always spend time to writings that would challenge me in a different level. And thi.. read more
Mary Ann M.

6 Years Ago

Like I said, sometimes, the mind is overloaded with thoughts, interlacing thoughts, images, overflow.. read more
kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Unfortunately I've been unsuccessful in selling anything, much to my dismay lol It just happens lik.. read more

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Tags: found, lost, window, rain, redefine, despondency, sacrement, monotone, almanac, writer, romance, treason

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kublakhan27

Nova Scotia, Canada



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