DISCOMFORT  FOOD

DISCOMFORT FOOD

A Poem by kublakhan27
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My first affair with strawberry fermented heaven on my tongue
The milky sweetness of vanilla carpentered the bottom rung
upon the ladder my enlightened sweet teeth were about to climb
for the height of comfort food fulfillment guilty-pleasurably sublime
And chocolate never failed to incite my will to munch
on dessert that pulled me by the tongue around the mandate of lunch
since I'd yet to let the winter cool of mint consult my lips
on the eve of more vanilla but this time with chocolate chips
By the time I sampled neapolitan my mouth was numb
My stomach swooned and to a headache I was destined to succumb
I laid down for a nap and woke up in an ice cream shop
where I walked toward a talking scoop that ordered me to stop
In disbelief I managed to say to it, "What are you?"
It replied with mouth I couldn't see, "Why I am peachy through and through
because dear glutton we have given you our comfort for too long
and now the flavours and I are to prove it's with us it belongs."
Chocolate and vanilla swirled up into an avalanche
Rolling fast toward me it did not allow a backward glance
On that front I needed fancy footwork to escape its path
just in time to see it only fueled the chocolate's wrath
Then in chocolate chips of ammo I was suddenly awash
but I woke in time to sidestep the electric tigersquash
Now unjust desserts I reckon summoned me to this bad dream
but my heart and not my tummy hurts to think of bad ice cream 

© 2013 kublakhan27


Author's Note

kublakhan27
I'd write more fun stuff like this if I could but, well, I can't...anyways, a conversation with a friend of mine inspired me to post this one ;)

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Lots of tongue action in this one Benji, I must have been on hiatus for this delight ..you and your vanilla...ha, discomfort, hardly sounds like it, this had to be drug induced, peachy background glances and plenty of chocolate, I almost want to take a bite out of it! Ftw is 'electric tigersquash', this is off the charts even for you Steve...always a trip with you! ;-) xo

100 scoops, vanilla of course!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

5 Years Ago

How about my bad boy pants Mrs.R? LOL ;P
Frieda P

5 Years Ago

Are they vanilla? hahaha
kublakhan27

5 Years Ago

LOL I'll spray them with vanilla extract...I'm nothing if not ironic after all ;P



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This is brilliant! Best poem about food and dreaming about desserts! loved it

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

5 Years Ago

Thanks so much Quirklet :)
funny is very hard to write, just like actors say doing comedy is much harder than drama...

but the tongue-in-cheek humor of this gives me brain freeze from reading too fast...and my stomach feels a little funny---:)

very well done, Steve.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

5 Years Ago

Haha Glad you enjoyed it Jacob, many thanks :)
Lots of tongue action in this one Benji, I must have been on hiatus for this delight ..you and your vanilla...ha, discomfort, hardly sounds like it, this had to be drug induced, peachy background glances and plenty of chocolate, I almost want to take a bite out of it! Ftw is 'electric tigersquash', this is off the charts even for you Steve...always a trip with you! ;-) xo

100 scoops, vanilla of course!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

5 Years Ago

How about my bad boy pants Mrs.R? LOL ;P
Frieda P

5 Years Ago

Are they vanilla? hahaha
kublakhan27

5 Years Ago

LOL I'll spray them with vanilla extract...I'm nothing if not ironic after all ;P
I scream you scream we all scream for icecream. Icecream is a weakness, Rocky road that one, this was a fun read Kubla made me smile..

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

5 Years Ago

Haha Yes, ice cream is like kryptonite for humans I think. It's nice to have fun writing something .. read more
A beguiling and delicious story. For my money, there's nothing like chocolate chip mind.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

5 Years Ago

Chocolate chip cookie dough does it for me haha Thank you Pryde.
A cornucopia of imagery is served up deliciously in this one! I love the personification of the food “I’d yet to let the winter cool of mint consult my lips.” A minty fresh taste invaded my senses with that line! Ice cream scoops talking to you? Then you are being pummeled with chocolate chips? A rebellion of rich foods! Sounds like a bad trip to me! LOL Oh, this is just a delightful romp, Kubla. Just desserts indeed! Your imagination knows no limits. Lydi**

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

5 Years Ago

LOL I know, my imagination has a way of gravitating towards psychedelic nightmares regularly...somet.. read more
Creative, unique, and a well rounded adaptation of why the taste buds and stomach are a reminder of what bad discomfort food really is. Nice job. :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Haha indeed...glad you like it :)
laid down for a nap and woke up in an ice cream shop
where I walked toward a talking scoop that ordered me to stop

You do have a sweet tooth problem when you start dreaming about talking spoons!
What an incredible nightmare...you know my worst dreams as a child were about inanimate objects coming to life, "off subject" anways I like your dry humor. Serve some more of your sarcasm up in a waffle cone please. :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Indeed haha I don't know if this is the same thing, but for YEARS I did not go to bed facing my bed.. read more
Oh, yet again you surprise me with another clever piece of work you have created! This is fun, and charming! I love how you describe all the yummy flavors - yet they are attacking you!
"I laid down for a nap and woke up in an ice cream shop
where I walked toward a talking scoop that ordered me to stop"
haha - Love this line! Ice cream dream! Or hell? And just to prove your they tell you they have given you comfort food for to long - so it has become discomfort food! Your fancy footwork! This is a dream gone wild - to the hells of ice cream! Absolutely love it my friend!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Haha I actually kept this one to myself for quite a while cuz it is such a departure for me so I'm g.. read more
The Random Writings Of Me..Kates

6 Years Ago

Your work I think is a success! To me for sure :)
kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

:D
I love Ice Cream so I can relate to this 100% Yes Yes Yes It's unfortunate that Glutton ruined things for you.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Haha well I figured it would be a pretty universal theme...who doesn't like ice cream after all?

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Tags: ice, cream, food, snack, sweet, sugar, chocolate, vanilla, mint, chips, dream, nightmare, comfort, discomfort, winter, lips, strawberry, tongue, milk, peach

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Nova Scotia, Canada



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