HOW I VISION YOU

HOW I VISION YOU

A Poem by kublakhan27
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I.

Can I swim through your ripples
of cleansing azure
Stand up to your tempest?
Wash up on your shore?
Embrace the polarity
of your allure?
Can I try on your silhouette
like a lost contour?

II.

Your skin is a breeze
and my hands want to fly
My fingers are wings
in the flesh of your sky
You're stars and I'm stripes
on the peak of July
when your dunk tank ripples
suck my fireworks dry

III.

Tell me that I'm overboard
or that I'm not too bright
It gives me further reason
to seek out your guiding light
I may not be a poet
but these lover's words are true
Flawed only in your flawlessness
That's how I vision you

© 2013 kublakhan27


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When a Canadian has the balls to write about Stars and Stripes and make it sound this good, I stand and applaud (not literally, that would be silly) ;-) You had me at "Stand up to your tempest..." You took me over the top with everything that followed...Great write, k...simply that.

Posted 9 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

Haha oh it's all good...I have a good grasp of your style of humour now :D
KAOlmsted

9 Years Ago

;-)
kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

;)



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I'd never guess you were Canadian if kimmers didn't mention it. This piece speaks in so many volumes of beauty, grace and humanity. It (the subject) is perfect in it's imperfection. Beautiful poem sir

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

Haha yeah we've always had this artistic stigma about us that compels all our best artists to go to .. read more
KeeD

9 Years Ago

Haha hopefully i'm moving to Canada this year. If I do happen to make it there, sometime in the futu.. read more
kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

Absolutely :) We're actually the second-largest country in the world in terms of land mass (I'm not .. read more
nice piece.... wonderful rhymes :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

Many thanks :)
bryandc15

9 Years Ago

No problem:)
reads well...think it should be spoken publicly

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

It would be interesting for sure, thanks as always^^
I loved your rhymes. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

Thanks very much :)
It gives me further reason
to seek out your guiding light
I may not be a poet
but these lover's words are true.
My faves in this awesome poem and well written...:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

Many thanks Sami :)
Sami Khalil

9 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)
Oh, you're a poet. No doubt about that.. and a damn good one too, IMHO. Wow, khan. This is really a good one. You know me, the way I read things... still, there's an organic precision, a may-i/can-i that puts the reader in the launch booth just before the lift off of the first celebratory salvo from the water-barged munitions. Then, that illumination of the corporeal elements of air, earth, fire and water; like a forgotten passage from Handel's Waterworks. The finale of honesty is a bare naked telling of an inner soul paying tribute to guiltless admiration. Trust me. If (ever) you say you made this up on a whim, or as an experiment, I may be forced to impale you with this masterpiece.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

You humble me with your praise, my friend...I am pretty proud of this one, but I never would have pe.. read more
Lovely write full of great imagery , flawed only in your flawlessness great line, the second last stanza brought a smile.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

Thank you as always, I'm glad it made you smile :)
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Pax
very sweet and nice my friend...
the last stanza is relate-able...
great work as always!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words as always :)
When a Canadian has the balls to write about Stars and Stripes and make it sound this good, I stand and applaud (not literally, that would be silly) ;-) You had me at "Stand up to your tempest..." You took me over the top with everything that followed...Great write, k...simply that.

Posted 9 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

Haha oh it's all good...I have a good grasp of your style of humour now :D
KAOlmsted

9 Years Ago

;-)
kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

;)
ummhmmm..

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

:P
Zizzy Douglas

9 Years Ago

:P?

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Tags: swim, ripples, azure, tempest, silhouette, skin, hands, breeze, fingers, flesh, lover, poet, lust

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kublakhan27

Nova Scotia, Canada



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