HOW I VISION YOU

01 16 13

I.

Can I swim through your ripples
of cleansing azure
Stand up to your tempest?
Wash up on your shore?
Embrace the polarity
of your allure?
Can I try on your silhouette
like a lost contour?

II.

Your skin is a breeze
and my hands want to fly
My fingers are wings
in the flesh of your sky
You're stars and I'm stripes
on the peak of July
when your dunk tank ripples
suck my fireworks dry

III.

Tell me that I'm overboard
or that I'm not too bright
It gives me further reason
to seek out your guiding light
I may not be a poet
but these lover's words are true
Flawed only in your flawlessness
That's how I vision you

Author's Note

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

When a Canadian has the balls to write about Stars and Stripes and make it sound this good, I stand and applaud (not literally, that would be silly) ;-) You had me at "Stand up to your tempest..." You took me over the top with everything that followed...Great write, k...simply that.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you as always Kimmer :) With Canada Day and Independence Day being celebrated in the same week, I wanted to work a Maple Leaf into that particular image but couldn't get it to go...once I had those lines down, I knew they were down to stay ;)

[KAOlmsted]

wtf is Canada Day? *laugh* Just kidding ;-) Seriously, always my pleasure. They are great lines; glad they stayed.

[kublakhan27]

LOL You know, I had a feeling you'd say something like that ;D

[KAOlmsted]

:-D I kid because I love...

[kublakhan27]

Haha oh it's all good...I have a good grasp of your style of humour now :D

[KAOlmsted]

;-)

[kublakhan27]

;)

[KeeD]

I'd never guess you were Canadian if kimmers didn't mention it. This piece speaks in so many volumes of beauty, grace and humanity. It (the subject) is perfect in it's imperfection. Beautiful poem sir

[kublakhan27]

Haha yeah we've always had this artistic stigma about us that compels all our best artists to go to the States for recognition before getting it here...that's why American imagery is so prevalent in a lot of our art...but that's not to say I haven't written a fair bit of Canadiana as well :) Thank you as always for the support my friend.

[KeeD]

Haha hopefully i'm moving to Canada this year. If I do happen to make it there, sometime in the future I would love to share a cuppa' with you and just talk. You seem like an amazing person who I could learn a lot from :P plus have a laugh or two.

[kublakhan27]

Absolutely :) We're actually the second-largest country in the world in terms of land mass (I'm not sure how well-known that fact is) so there are all kinds of beautiful bits to see. Mind you, I live in one of tiniest parts so you need a real good map to see it haha

[bryandc15]

nice piece.... wonderful rhymes :)

[kublakhan27]

Many thanks :)

[bryandc15]

No problem:)

[gombeggar]

reads well...think it should be spoken publicly

[kublakhan27]

It would be interesting for sure, thanks as always^^

[Asilem]

I loved your rhymes. :)

[kublakhan27]

Thanks very much :)

[Sami Khalil]

It gives me further reason
to seek out your guiding light
I may not be a poet
but these lover's words are true.
My faves in this awesome poem and well written...:)

[kublakhan27]

Many thanks Sami :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

Oh, you're a poet. No doubt about that.. and a damn good one too, IMHO. Wow, khan. This is really a good one. You know me, the way I read things... still, there's an organic precision, a may-i/can-i that puts the reader in the launch booth just before the lift off of the first celebratory salvo from the water-barged munitions. Then, that illumination of the corporeal elements of air, earth, fire and water; like a forgotten passage from Handel's Waterworks. The finale of honesty is a bare naked telling of an inner soul paying tribute to guiltless admiration. Trust me. If (ever) you say you made this up on a whim, or as an experiment, I may be forced to impale you with this masterpiece.

[kublakhan27]

You humble me with your praise, my friend...I am pretty proud of this one, but I never would have pegged it for a masterpiece...I probably did smirk my way through the last part, and I do have that way of wading into the things I write, but that's quintessential me: cautious to a fault in real life, which bleeds into my paper-based alter-ego...trust me, it's definitely an alter-ego haha...you can also trust me when I say I do nothing on a whim, which irritates me at times cuz at this point in my life I hardly know what spontaneity means...this is a response to a friend's poem (a female one, mind you, but a friend :P), one of the rhetorical variety I guess you could say, taking the general tone into consideration...anyways I shall sign off by reiterating how important your support is to my writing and my self-esteem for that matter...both would be pretty weak otherwise :)

[MOON]

Lovely write full of great imagery , flawed only in your flawlessness great line, the second last stanza brought a smile.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you as always, I'm glad it made you smile :)

[Pax]

very sweet and nice my friend...
the last stanza is relate-able...
great work as always!

[kublakhan27]

Thank you for your kind words as always :)

[Zizzy Douglas]

ummhmmm..

[kublakhan27]

:P

[Zizzy Douglas]

:P?