Can I swim through your ripples of cleansing azure Stand up to your tempest? Wash up on your shore? Embrace the polarity of your allure? Can I try on your silhouette like a lost contour?
II.
Your skin is a breeze and my hands want to fly My fingers are wings in the flesh of your sky You're stars and I'm stripes on the peak of July when your dunk tank ripples suck my fireworks dry
III.
Tell me that I'm overboard or that I'm not too bright It gives me further reason to seek out your guiding light I may not be a poet but these lover's words are true Flawed only in your flawlessness That's how I vision you
When a Canadian has the balls to write about Stars and Stripes and make it sound this good, I stand and applaud (not literally, that would be silly) ;-) You had me at "Stand up to your tempest..." You took me over the top with everything that followed...Great write, k...simply that.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you as always Kimmer :) With Canada Day and Independence Day being celebrated in the same wee.. read moreThank you as always Kimmer :) With Canada Day and Independence Day being celebrated in the same week, I wanted to work a Maple Leaf into that particular image but couldn't get it to go...once I had those lines down, I knew they were down to stay ;)
11 Years Ago
wtf is Canada Day? *laugh* Just kidding ;-) Seriously, always my pleasure. They are great lines;.. read morewtf is Canada Day? *laugh* Just kidding ;-) Seriously, always my pleasure. They are great lines; glad they stayed.
11 Years Ago
LOL You know, I had a feeling you'd say something like that ;D
Wow! Awesome! The rhyming is classic. I liked the flag reference, it's somewhat unexpected. The poem itself is unexpected, if you know what I mean:) But it still got a touch of your writing style which is a good thing. A++++
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thank you Maryanne, I'm glad you like it :) I'm not sure how to explain it, it kind of came out of t.. read moreThank you Maryanne, I'm glad you like it :) I'm not sure how to explain it, it kind of came out of the blue and it was probably as unexpected to you as it was to me haha I tried to work in a reference to my flag too, but once those lines went down I was like yeah, those lines are there to stay ;)
11 Years Ago
This made me think of a hugeWrangler ad campaign billboard on my way home from work, lol.read more
This made me think of a hugeWrangler ad campaign billboard on my way home from work, lol.
On a more serious side, there are things that are meant to be written even if they are less to our liking because are simply meant to be. Just like lovers.
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11 Years Ago
lol I'll take that as a good omen ;P Contrary to what the poem says, you know I am most certainly a .. read morelol I'll take that as a good omen ;P Contrary to what the poem says, you know I am most certainly a poet and not a lover...I just think about being a lover a lot...but everything happens for a reason I suppose.
11 Years Ago
I don't even know why I spoke of lovers lol. I tried posting a hoto of the as on the reply box, unfo.. read moreI don't even know why I spoke of lovers lol. I tried posting a hoto of the as on the reply box, unfortunately HTML no longer works on comment boxes so. And I agree with "everything happens for a reason." Maybe its about time, lmao jk. Raccoon! Errr... Rock on!
Oh I'm not joking, it's definitely about time LOL It's okay, I've seen Wrangler ads so I have some i.. read moreOh I'm not joking, it's definitely about time LOL It's okay, I've seen Wrangler ads so I have some idea of what it might be like :P
11 Years Ago
Lol, good:) I can be obsessive sometimes and today unlike some other days, I feel high. o_O
.. read moreLol, good:) I can be obsessive sometimes and today unlike some other days, I feel high. o_O
I felt too driven. I'm not sure if it's the lack of sleep or the caffein in my blood.
11 Years Ago
:) That's a good way to be...I could use some highness these days :P Well you're talking to Mr. OCD .. read more:) That's a good way to be...I could use some highness these days :P Well you're talking to Mr. OCD so I'm sure I know what you mean to at least some extent...some people chain-smoke, I have been chain-drinking coffee the last several days, but I'm also an insomniac so sleep is a moot point anyway lol
I read this one before the RR, just noticed James, wanted to say good choice. ;-)
11 Years Ago
Haha that was a late addition...I just happened to be listening to him last night and I thought yeah.. read moreHaha that was a late addition...I just happened to be listening to him last night and I thought yeah, that'll work ;)
My first book is out! Any comments that anyone may have to offer regarding my work would be deeply appreciated, as I'm yet to get a review.
www.amazon.com/Waltz-Around-Swirls-Steven-Fortune/dp.. more..
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