HELLO MR. HAMMER

HELLO MR. HAMMER

A Poem by kublakhan27
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03 03 13

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Hello Mr. Hammer
you come to me
like an athlete in a trade
There's a manager in bed
an owner in my head
and a mandate for madrigal
mechanics

I can't say I don't miss my sickle
and its dutifully sly hook
informing me of fabric
for the taking
over the pedestrian tease
of my self-concealing knees
With a sickle
I could lure in the cargo for superiors
With a hammer
now I see that I can
get a job done myself
So I welcome you aboard
Mr. Hammer
deadline acquisition
Now I know my team of limbs
is in advanced transition

Thank you manager
for bolstering my prospects
Now for playoffs
when the play gets off
on winners' purpose
Now you
come to me my manager
I have a champion
that wants to come
to terms with you

© 2013 kublakhan27


Author's Note

kublakhan27
I'm not sure if I should even mention this, but I've been writing for many years and this is the first time I've ever written something with pen in one hand and alcohol in the other...this may be gone in a few hours when I look at it with a level head...till now, I'm putting it out there to see if it makes any sense to anyone, then I'll take it from there...




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I love that song...just saying ;-) Your first drunken poem? Awesome job. I find writing drunk is just one of those things that happens *laugh* I mean, if it didn't, I wouldn't get much done xD I love the title, too, and that last line...great stuff.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Oh that's one of my favourite songs of all-time and I think it fits ;) I actually don't like alcohol.. read more
KAOlmsted

11 Years Ago

;-) Ah...gotcha...
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Haha I know ;)



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Great song and album. I have trouble writing without alcohol:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

In The Light and Trampled^^
The Analog Kid

11 Years Ago

Then there's ten years gone and down by the seaside. One of the few double albums that DESERVE to b.. read more
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Agreed :)
I love that song...just saying ;-) Your first drunken poem? Awesome job. I find writing drunk is just one of those things that happens *laugh* I mean, if it didn't, I wouldn't get much done xD I love the title, too, and that last line...great stuff.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Oh that's one of my favourite songs of all-time and I think it fits ;) I actually don't like alcohol.. read more
KAOlmsted

11 Years Ago

;-) Ah...gotcha...
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Haha I know ;)
You want promotion!
Manager wants commission!
Let's commit sins of ommision!


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Haha Everybody wants something :P
poetry-kiddo alienbaba

11 Years Ago

I want your troubles.
Hi sweet friend, omg... do you know how much I prayed for this Mr. Hammer in my life? lol, you are brilliant, to write about it. For me insomnia, mostly!! Greaaaat song of our LED! If you're bored of him, please send him over to me will ya... :D to knock me down, mostly.... ;) this write, was work related I know... but you gave me new insights... maybe from another dimention ha! ;) well done! :) So enjoyed!

- Elisa

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Haha you understood very well, I was just suggesting that there was much more going on in this piece.. read more

11 Years Ago

:) have a great day too my friend xo
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

:) xo
man everytime i just took it as an aestheticly nice sounding word but of course my friend you have taken it to a whole other level

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Thank you my friend, I'm glad you enjoy my work.
Sounds to me like you've released the krakens, writing in gay abandon...hey, if you don't understand it, why you asking me? I know you're tired, and the cat is in heat, you get a pass, still love this! Cheers!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Haha was my tipsiness that obvious? ;P I think I have no choice but to understand my stuff because I.. read more
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

That's just the mystery that is you...ha....funny, how I got this one, you need to be hammered more .. read more
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Haha what can I say, if I didn't think you were dialed into my stuff before, I do now ;) Sadly my he.. read more
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Pax
seems like mr. Hammer is doing its job... :D I'm quite the opposite when I'm hammered... lol... but this is really a good write and while mr. Hammer is there with you... your inspirations kicks in.... now the question is will mr. Hammer always be there or just coming occiasionally... ;)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Haha a very eloquent assessment my friend :D I will have to learn how to channel him cuz I don't kno.. read more
it is ruff and raw...good stuff...u oughta be pleased with yerself for this freely written bit

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Thanks very much^^
You were hammered when you wrote this? LOL
You little devil you! ;)
Hey, I think this is entertaining, and definitely expressed your subconscious mind...
They say that alcohol is the truth serum... is that right? I'm not sure...

Well (in the past), when I try to write after consuming a little too much, I cannot even see straight, let alone write about anything of substance! lol

So bravo! Nicely done!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

LOL You won't believe it but the "hammered" analogy didn't even cross my mind at the time...I had a .. read more
Is Mr. Hammer suppose to be a hero here? Bringing either new or old love to melt down your frozen poetic grease? Being back to your mom's place and unable to play hockey opens a new window, doesn't it? Hockey, no matter your love for it is your deviation from surreality and your constant awareness to reality thus altering your poetic lust. And I think it is a good thing. Because it neutralizes you. Well I hope Mr. Hammer and your manager wll have a good working relationship for your benefit:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

LOL I know, I saw it right away ;)
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

It's pretty much a given that I'm going to at least attempt something on paper now...I've built it u.. read more
Androglossia

11 Years Ago

Go right ahead, I'm telling you before winter completely leaves =D

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Tags: hammer, athlete, trade, manager, owner, bed, win, sickle, hook, tease, superiors, champion, prospect, playoffs

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kublakhan27

Nova Scotia, Canada



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