A COMMON REFRAIN

A COMMON REFRAIN

A Poem by kublakhan27
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When we're young
we run and shout
knowing what it's all about

When we're old
we reminisce
longing for the days we miss

Meeting the demands of others
Preachers, fathers, teachers, mothers
Constant pleas to clean the mess
Wanting more when you have less

Suddenly you're just a number
Outlook bleak and future glummer
Hoping that your luck will change
Hoping change is within range

We go away to find ourselves
or maybe stay and fill the shelves
with fragments of a broken past
The future's here, let's have a blast

And as we grow we live and learn
We wonder if we will return
to days when now was all we had
When being good meant being bad

Now we're old
and more mature?
Choices and mistakes galore

Were they what
we hoped they'd be?
We'll just have to wait and see

© 2013 kublakhan27


Author's Note

kublakhan27
An extremely rare piece of youthful idealism from a point in time when I was already cynical as hell...I pulled this out yesterday after MANY years of not looking at it, and I laughed...

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Wow, I didn't know you back when you still made sense! I knew without you saying, this couldn't have been recent, not cynical enough and I could understand it without reading it 12 times! Excellent write from whoever you were back then.... ;-)

Love that song by the way....wonder why eh?

Posted 6 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Haha yeah I guess life made more sense to me than I did to myself...not much has changed ;P That son.. read more



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Straightforward write, different when we young we yearn to be older then we are and suddenly everything changes . Lovely write.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Haha yeah it's funny to go back and find out what you sounded like when you were younger...embarrass.. read more
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Pax
precise and truthful...
our physical appearance may age... but there is one beat in our heart that stays young...
an excellent write my friend!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Very true my friend...I'm glad you like it :)
I never thought of growing up actually if possible I would like to stay as a child for a long time but we can't do that, right?

Posted 6 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

I think we can...growing up is overrated ;)
Rhianne Ney

6 Years Ago

lolz, I hope so too
*blink blink* What?? Oh, okay, yeah...I see the date now ;-)

This is good. It's interesting to see how you've evolved as a poet. I lost a great deal of my older work when our boat sank up in Alaska (long story, don't even ask *laugh*) but I sincerely don't think any of it was nearly as good as this, so no great loss...I like the much more jaded and cynical you, if anyone is keeping score ;-)



Posted 6 Years Ago


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KAOlmsted

6 Years Ago

Your depths are fathomless...I'm getting the bends xD Always my pleasure, Steve...I am having a sec.. read more
kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Oh, I like the sound of that :) Your secret is safe with me my dear ;)
KAOlmsted

6 Years Ago

;-)
This digs at the root, Kube. The meaning of life - not so pure and not so simple. I think this is a superb philosophical muse perfectly poeticised. P.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Thank you my friend...seems like I was much more philosophical when I was younger, now I'm just "wha.. read more
awww I love the song!...it compliments this piece perfectly...
You are on point with this...a melancholy tone settles in my thoughts thinking about the past, present, and future..
Time continues and slips away... que sera, sera....

Well penned!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robbie~xoxo~

6 Years Ago

I do... makes me reflect on my own memories and the path not taken...(sigh)...

c'est la.. read more
kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

I understand...we always wonder about the paths we didn't take, and wonder if we took the right ones.. read more
Robbie~xoxo~

6 Years Ago

"wonder"... such a pleasant word, it holds so much promise, still yet... ~xoxo~:)
Wow, I didn't know you back when you still made sense! I knew without you saying, this couldn't have been recent, not cynical enough and I could understand it without reading it 12 times! Excellent write from whoever you were back then.... ;-)

Love that song by the way....wonder why eh?

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Haha yeah I guess life made more sense to me than I did to myself...not much has changed ;P That son.. read more
you definitely have a gift my dear. Nice pen!

Posted 6 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Thank you Keely, I appreciate that :)
i absolutely fookin' love this write! this is a departure for you...your usual style is not here but this is so good it rocks. the meter, the rhyme, the message....all are brilliant! outstanding write, my friend!

Posted 6 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Haha thanks so much my friend...it's not my usual style cuz it's old haha I'm really glad you like i.. read more
quinfinn

6 Years Ago

be proud...it is golden
kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

:D

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Nova Scotia, Canada



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