STOREYS UNDERNEATH MY FEET

STOREYS UNDERNEATH MY FEET

A Poem by kublakhan27
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05 22 13

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I.

Bestow on me the unredeemed
history of some time-maligned camp
hiding out in mangled hieroglyphics
storeys underneath my feet
too abyssal for encouragement from Pompeii
too fleet in cameos hanging
from the rotted props of a
collective unconscious

Like children in reverse
I'll adopt the millstone of
every lonesome epoch
laddering above me
not to climb like a
pulpit of existence
but to circumvent the pace
of history's marathon of severance
slowed by stumbles on
the hurdles of the established

II.

Archeologists employ sandy knees
to align their sight
with a dyke of dirt to punch
holes into with rock fists of consensus

Like me their underground
is not a ceiling but a wall

III.

I supersede myself in solitude
with aspirations of an irretrievable
time-capsule fate

Too alive I remain to run
from a sentence swinging me into
the data dungeon of a census

The unseen-forest-tree history
will have to wait
as I close my eyes and harp on
some way to worm my essence
into the fine print of a footnote
living only in the indifferent
squints of readers strapped for time

© 2013 kublakhan27


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First of and always Thankyou is funny how images can work against you if one reads the description on the right hand side you define yourself in ways. I work in IT so probably pay too much attenion to them things and it automatically created an image of what I was about to read all wrong I guess but onwards. The fact is thatI felt quite a strong unravelling and desire for something to come about. Very strong in its own diversity. Thoughts coming to think you away. And the stregnths continue. Indeed too alive.
A source of stregnth really and a good one.


Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

I know what you mean...I'm always hesitant to put those tag words in for that very reason and I may .. read more



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First of and always Thankyou is funny how images can work against you if one reads the description on the right hand side you define yourself in ways. I work in IT so probably pay too much attenion to them things and it automatically created an image of what I was about to read all wrong I guess but onwards. The fact is thatI felt quite a strong unravelling and desire for something to come about. Very strong in its own diversity. Thoughts coming to think you away. And the stregnths continue. Indeed too alive.
A source of stregnth really and a good one.


Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

I know what you mean...I'm always hesitant to put those tag words in for that very reason and I may .. read more
You have such talent and I love your words and work :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

I'm so glad you do, and you know I love your work as well :) Thanks so much for the support and taki.. read more
Rosaria_V

7 Years Ago

Anytime!! and I thank you as well:))
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Your words will live on, man. They will. I don't review you often enough. Your last stanza tells you why. You can leave the indifferent bit out, though. I have to really open myself and think when I read you. I am a simple writer, as you know. I have to work on the more complex stuff. Always love your work! Angi~

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

You always know how to humble me my friend...I'm not a patient person by nature, but writing is the .. read more
Angi

7 Years Ago

You have my support, Steve! You do. I understand, too.
kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

And you have mine, always :)
Oh yeah, I totally get it...really. No need to explain, I mean, shuh, what else COULD it be about, right? So, yeah...I hear ya, man...It is so completely like that. Yup.

Yup.

Yup.

;-)



Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Haha so, does that mean you like it? ;)
KAOlmsted

7 Years Ago

Silly question. You may as well ask me if I like gin ;-) xoxo
kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Haha gotcha ;) xoxo
This was a sensory experience...cryptic in the best possible way. I tried to "figure it out", but then I read it again and just allowed the words to wash over me and found that sometimes in looking too closely at something we begin to unravel the tapestry and we are left with nothing but a pile of thread where once there was beauty. So...I shall leave my imagination to run wild with this one and just enjoy the ride. You are a wordsmith of the highest caliber.

One little question:
Should it be "Stories Underneath my Feet"?

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Thank you Sarah :) I like the approach the took with this...I was hoping this cater to the imaginati.. read more
Well, well... I wrote this long "thing", my usual interpretations, you know, but I'm reluctant to besmirch your nice page with it. I let it set for a couple of hours and it sprouted a sort of icky mold. You can still have it if you want it. O_o

That said, I'm pretty sure history will find a good place for you and your work. Something a little more prominent than a footnote. Sheesh! Give yourself a little credit, OK? Of course it may be the history as told by sand worms or hooter monkeys but hey, it's all good, right? :)


Posted 7 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Haha yeah people tell me I should blow my own horn more often but my inferiority complex doesn't all.. read more
I loved how you numbered the stanzas! :) Smart cookie you are, haha. This was a really intriguing write that had me hooked from the first line. I think you have a lovely way with words and writing them, then making wonderful poetry! Haha.

This was written in such a way that I had to read it to my Gran so she could explain it to me, haha, I loved it though and she said it's really well written! :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


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s y e

7 Years Ago

The pleasure was ours :) It was great and we both enjoyed it, I love your works. Always a great plea.. read more
kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

:) xo
s y e

7 Years Ago

xo
There's so much brilliance in this poem, too abyssal for encouragement from Pompeii
this line itself speaks volumes knowing Pompeii's pride/ego and personality.. wow..
i cannot say i understood the entirety of the poem and that i'll say is due to my lack of intelligence but this poem lacked nothing, i'd love to know what this poem means in detail whenever you get the time. love your writing, i'm like dumbfounded at the brilliance my eyes have just encountered through your words.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much my friend...I assure you that lack of intelligence has nothing to do with it...you.. read more
Love the formated numbered stanzas. It adds reverance to a well written poem displaying a creative genius within the theme of it. Great write. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

I actually debated the numbered stanzas for quite a while, but the more I thought about it, the more.. read more

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Tags: alienation, resignation, loneliness, despair, unredeemed, history, unconscious, underground, wall, solitude, fate, indifferent

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Nova Scotia, Canada



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