BLUE ROSE TRIPTYCH

BLUE ROSE TRIPTYCH

A Poem by kublakhan27
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07 01 13

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I.

The balance sheet of my internal work
bottoms out in blood assessments
shading every measurement of record
with its iron evocation tinge
One day's spectral serenade
held a note of cherry blossom pink
hueing my accrued debt lacerations
in a burnishing of dissolution
No crimson-dipped verdure had a chance
against the angular azure rose crown
and the prism court it hovered over

II.

One single person on one single day
sent me flowers: a blue rose roof erected
for "the star gazer and the color lover"
No u to be found in the plasticine
forked note shooting out of the
prismatic mini-glade...a New England wink
to ignite a withered Northern Light
Wry shelter for a fellow poet's sense
of metaphor refusing to be flatlined
by the gestures of the simplest kind

III.

I recall a solitary day's sentiment of scents
and the humid hiss of life's toxic breath
on its origin of stems
My balance sheet of annual internal work
wheezes in a patina of dried blood now
freezing the informing of your untimely wilt
in a single photograph taken
to remind me of the one bouquet
that coloured that solitary day

© 2013 kublakhan27


Author's Note

kublakhan27
I hate writing in the Summer...I can't concentrate when it's hot out, and wind up getting frustrated because I can't organize my thoughts as I'd like, and that's how I feel after spending parts of a week on this one...I don't know, maybe it's just the inspirational circumstances of the piece that has me feeling so flustered right now...I guess I'll know in a few days...

In memory of Clare.


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Once in our lives, we bump into something extraordinary to help us realize the importance of 'now'. And I think it is not the experience that lingers but the lesson embed into our being which I think is going to be useful in time. I can see how Clare's exit affected you but I'm confident that you have learned something useful from it. As of the poem, it's highly emotional which is not your usual but it is the emotion that makes it exceptional.

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

At first I was a little surprised to hear you say that my work usually doesn't have such highly-char.. read more
Androglossia

10 Years Ago

I have known you as a friend and had been earnestly reading you for more than 12 months. Need I say .. read more
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha you need not say another word my dear :) I couldn't agree more with everything you've said here.. read more



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Verbosity at its finest. Loved the vocabulary in this piece as well as the profound emotion hidden within it. If I had to describe this poem in one word...abysmal. Excellent pen friend.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Keely :)
Amazing metaphor in this one... Love II the best!! Brilliant poem!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Red...it's a personal piece so I'm really glad you liked it this much :)
I can see why you have that BA in English Lit.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha It kind of happened by default...it was the only thing I didn't suck at.
Kenneth The Poet

10 Years Ago

I get that. After reading, I decided to try the tryptich myself. Thanks for the inspiration.
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

My pleasure, it makes me happy to know I inspire others.
(Sorry I haven't been visiting your.. read more
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Pax
your words always dance with beautiful imagery and great vocab... well i hate summer too when it becomes too hot to handle... spending time in the cold waters of springs my hate of summers fades off... :) .... the flowers made you remember something and disarray your thoughts... don't worry my friend it will pass... great piece!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha I'm scared to say too much about my ambivalence toward the summer cuz people think me weird eno.. read more
I am finding it interesting how everyone's poetry seems to be growing and going, and thereby surely the lives behind them. A part of me finds this particular poem quite sad and in a way disturbing, yet attractive (as often sad and disturbing can often be alluring). Beautiful piece in my opinion.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

The circumstances behind the write were less than ideal, and it is a sad and somewhat disturbing pie.. read more
Once in our lives, we bump into something extraordinary to help us realize the importance of 'now'. And I think it is not the experience that lingers but the lesson embed into our being which I think is going to be useful in time. I can see how Clare's exit affected you but I'm confident that you have learned something useful from it. As of the poem, it's highly emotional which is not your usual but it is the emotion that makes it exceptional.

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

At first I was a little surprised to hear you say that my work usually doesn't have such highly-char.. read more
Androglossia

10 Years Ago

I have known you as a friend and had been earnestly reading you for more than 12 months. Need I say .. read more
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha you need not say another word my dear :) I couldn't agree more with everything you've said here.. read more
As someone once said to me, pish and tush, if this is your rendition of not being able to write in the summer, I'll eat my dancing shoes! Awe inspiring as always, I'd pick out a favorite line but then I'd be here all day copying and pasting....you often color my world with your poetry. "Make you wanna run around naked, Cause you know it looks go on you'...I love these glimpses inside your head. Kudos my dear friend.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha There are times when I should probably think before I type in those notes, or wait till my head.. read more
Well, your sojourn in what sounds like a hospital bed certainly supplied a proliferation of introspection spilling forth from a bunch of flowers, Steve! I`ve drowned myself in your superb phraseology, loving the irony. P.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thank you Pete :) I may need a hospital bed one of these days, of the mental variety...
You're one of the reasons I don't leave the café,haha. Amazing poetry like this is great to read! You should publish a book of your poetry sometime, it would be a massive hit! I know that for a fact. This was a haunting, poignant piece. I always love the imagery portrayed and wording of all your writes, awesome job!


~ Noodle.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

:) I know, I'm eagerly awaiting a word from the editor who is taking care of my manuscript, but the .. read more
s y e

10 Years Ago

Haha, thanks I'm glad you think that. Good, let me know when it's published!
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Will do :)
It is the closing that does it for me. You mix the beauty and sadness masterfully.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Pryde, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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Nova Scotia, Canada



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