A LOVE LETTER FROM A FAILED GENERATOR

A LOVE LETTER FROM A FAILED GENERATOR

A Poem by kublakhan27
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I.

Inside a meltdown
of aggrieved metaphors
we met and made the best
of icy memories

You were the apex
of a sullen candle wick's
heated umbrella
passing for protection
from the typhoon
of toxicity corroding
the artificial lights
I resorted to in search
of happiness

II.

Sickened by the cynicism
I could never conquer
without aid
the shrill wheeze
in my lungs stabbed
the air of my resigned
ignition like an acid
rain-rusted fork

Prongs of erosion
incinerated the dimensions
of my Great Pretender mask

I was open to the prospect
of a meltdown

III.

A power outage smirked
on the verge of threatening
my need for Winter white
to blind the pile-up of humid
months eroding my incentive
for an age's elevation

Then you came
puncturing the black aura
I was all too ready to adopt

I am already obligated to
the grey threshold 
it would appear
yet the parasol of your
embrace stifled my
corrosion of closure like
the blinders of a race horse

Simply through your place 
in my obstructed vision's show
you have won me
until I realize I'm out of candles
and the metaphors incline me
to reach around until I clutch
your heated cage of 
nightvision

© 2013 kublakhan27


Author's Note

kublakhan27


It took every ounce of my creative willpower to get this out. An abundance of things to say in recent weeks, but no words. Anyways I'll resist the urge to milk my self-pity any further.

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I wholeheartedly agree with Pax. I too experience this: whenever I read your words, I'm in a completely different world and sense things that can't be perceived in reality. Your poetry is very deep, beautiful, and uniquely crafted with a fine mastery of language. Bravo, once again!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

So glad you could relate, thanks very much :)
Gleb Zavlanov

7 Years Ago

My pleasure.



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I wholeheartedly agree with Pax. I too experience this: whenever I read your words, I'm in a completely different world and sense things that can't be perceived in reality. Your poetry is very deep, beautiful, and uniquely crafted with a fine mastery of language. Bravo, once again!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

So glad you could relate, thanks very much :)
Gleb Zavlanov

7 Years Ago

My pleasure.
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Pax
Hey my friend, every time I read one of your piece... it is always a mind blowing event to me. Perhaps it’s the rich metaphors or the wide range of your vocabulary or the overflowing of your imagery... with all that it combines a really good mix of profound poetry and emotional journey. Amazing work.

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kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much my friend...I'm sure I've said it a million times but your support means more than yo.. read more
Pax

7 Years Ago

Your most welcome. Keep it up, confidence is a matter of self-perseverance, to push ourselves to see.. read more
You've crafted quite a piece here... your metaphors are rich, and have a get balance of complexity and directness, which keeps them reachable to the reader. Amazing write.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much my friend, I always appreciate your kind words.
part two is especially visceral, profound and raw to me. This doesn't breathe. It seethes. It churns. some poems sing, some snarl and some have that guttural scream. this is a stellar mix of scream and snarl.

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kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Ah yes, there has been plenty of that these days, hopefully I can sing again soon...thanks my friend.. read more
the reflective type of light that flickers against spilled guts, and we as writers have to remark on your blinded stallions running in the spark fields of this tumble weed angle. There's a circular drive leading this piece to water to drink from and I never dive to far in for fear of drowning in these inkling of phylum for such tears are rip tide of oh....mmmmm...-currents ...amazing piece

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kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Always a pleasure reading your reviews my friend...you always bring different insights that I had ne.. read more
My dear,

Your stunning write in rich metaphors, reaches me deep, there is so much to say about this one, it is an endless thought, with side-ways, and holes and corners, where you can fall, or you may encounter... Yes, also here I can say to you, Hello Darkness, old friend... to embrace it and be aware of it, is just master, you do that so well. You're not afraid of your most dark and depressed feelings, they bring you pure art, as here... This is no self-pity at all, it's just creative what comes out of you in these darker times. The imagery is rich, and sometimes, out of the world. The pain is felt in this one, but there is some positivm always too, those who have nightvisions, have light and a survivor's heart...
You're ever so brilliant in your wordings. I'm happy I am a part of your life.

Beautiful Steve,
Sweet Bro,

May the luck, and happiness come soon,
For You're never alone sweet Bro. X

- Elisa


Posted 7 Years Ago


7 Years Ago

P.s. I forgot to mention, the song of Robert Plant is absolutely amazing, (huge fan of his music) ;)
kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Dear sis,

You've always had a way of humbling and inspiring me in equal measure, and us.. read more

7 Years Ago

Oh I got a buzz from BRO yay! and I'm awake, hey, never change, you're beautiful the way you are, in.. read more
Loved the journey from the depth's of a poet's conscience. Great work. A clever & splendid read. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Thank you my friend :)
"Sickened the the cynicism"...by the cynicism, perhaps?

Always such a thrilling endeavor to open one of your pieces, Steven. I can't begin to describe the things your writes do to me. I am always on the cusp of dazzling intellect surrounded by awkward sexuality hanging on for dear life by the skin of my grinding teeth. You give the best ink. And that ain't lip service, kid...although, should you ever need some... ;-)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Haha Do you really want me to answer that last question ;) It's okay hun, I'll live, it's just one .. read more
KAOlmsted

7 Years Ago

;-) They better offer room service...Meanwhile, chin up, lad. That always seems to be the best pos.. read more
kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Agreed on all fronts my dear ;) xoxo
Seems like a lot of introspection and soul searching here. Agitation and tumult in life expressed very well with metaphor and imagery. Vestiges of emotional pain and traces of inner demons between the lines. I think there is a lot to ponder in this one....and since I don't know you personally, it is difficult for me to figure out exactly what you are resolving. I do know this is well written...and obviously something you needed to write for personal reasons. Lydi**

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

You may not believe you know me well, but the accuracy and sympathy with which you interpret my word.. read more
Lydia Shutter

7 Years Ago

I do understand needing poetry to get you through. When I cared for my mom the last five years of h.. read more
kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Yes, I had a similar situation with my Dad, where I was looking after him in his last few months. I.. read more
WOW Steve!...another fine write, filled with inner turmoil.
What you write resonates in my heart, soul, and mind... all which fail to connect on dismal days such as this...
"the artificial lights

I resorted to in search

of happiness"~ This part really struck a cord with me..... I'm always searching, and sometimes we have to create our own light...artificial as it may be, it's better to reach for the light than being alone and depressed in the dark.

Well penned!...I enjoyed reading your abstract art!~xoxo~:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Thank you from the bottom of my heart...you understand me on a level that I never thought possible :.. read more

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Added on November 20, 2013
Last Updated on November 23, 2013
Tags: depression, loneliness, darkness, artificial, cynicism, resignation, erosion, mask, meltdown, Winter, embrace, nightvision

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kublakhan27

Nova Scotia, Canada



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My first book is out! Any comments that anyone may have to offer regarding my work would be deeply appreciated, as I'm yet to get a review. www.amazon.com/Waltz-Around-Swirls-Steven-Fortune/dp.. more..

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