LOST EVEN IN THE MOST NATURAL TRANSLATION

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I.

 

I get it

now

 

Salvation owes me

nothing

 

Symbolism only

passes

 

for the real

thing

 

when reality is under my

control

 

anyway

 

II.

 

Leave it to the storm's

scenery

 

of froth to hijack and

implement

 

a green hypnosis on my

seasonal

 

contentment

 

III.

 

Indecision dances in

derisive

 

stomps on the shingles in

interrogation

 

of my all too keen attention

deficit

 

chiseling away the natural

compulsion

 

I appease from the hopeless little

square

 

of my wanderlust

enameled

 

window

Author's Note

Captcha: weighin

I'd probably be in a better mood if someone brought me coffee...

Reviews

[Frieda P]

Are you the wandering Canadian Benji...I see your so-called 'all too keen attention deficit' relates to the illustrious Mr Cohen, see, genius? Winter still colors your enameled window with vibrant poetry, whether you see it yourself or not dear. You keep dancing mockingly and I'll bring the coffee, just keep writing these brilliant verses. Cheers to your seasonal contentment, you want sugar in that coffee? ;-) xo

[kublakhan27]

Ah you always know how to make me smile Mrs.R :) When I said I was waiting for the right poem to match up with that clip, I didn't think it was gonna be the next one I wrote, but I've definitely been wandering these days. Hopefully this piece whips my mind back into shape...cheers to you as well love, and I'm looking forward to the coffee ;) "No sugar tonight in my coffee, no sugar tonight in my tea, no sugar to stand beside me, no sugar to run with me" (another Canadian soundbite that I cling to a lot ;P)

[Frieda P]

Ha, soundbite this Benji....I meant my pleasure sweetems ;-P xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha sweetems...very nice Mrs.R ;P xo

[Frieda P]

Leave to Mrs R, she'll get you to smile :-D xo

[kublakhan27]

She always does ;D xo

[Frieda P]

That's her job..hahah

[Lyn Anderson]

not sure which lines I like better -- the attention deficit or the enamel, but either way, a stellar write.

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it K, thank you...there's more cynicism where this came from :P

[Rita L. Sev]

Ah, but will coffee help that "all too keen attention deficit" settle on a form to chisel? You chose your words to paint a mood, Steve, and it is impressive, to say the least. Saving this one to ponder on "seasonal contentment" a bit more...

[kublakhan27]

Haha I'm still kinda pondering this one myself Rita...maybe I should have said Irish Coffee :P So glad you enjoyed it, thank you as always :)

[s y e]

// Salvation owes me
nothing

Symbolism only
passes //

Well, look who's back and hitting the jackpot!? This is a great write Steveroo, I told you before you never lose it... You never did. You just forgot how amazeballs you were. :) Great job my friend, now keep that ink flowing!

[kublakhan27]

Haha Thanks so much Noodlebop...you know how it is with me and confidence, it's never been my strong suit...my insecurities always win out. But you always have a way of making me feel better, for which I am unspeakably grateful...thank you my friend, and I hope you're doing okay :)

[s y e]

I know, you and that confidence of yours, I'll sort you both out eventually, ha. :P You are always welcome, I am just happy you're writing.

[kublakhan27]

Haha thanks bud, that made me smile :)

[Kenneth The Poet]

This is a challenging piece to interpret. It is sparse, measured and egalitarian. Your choice of prose is also interesting. You win this round, sir.

[kublakhan27]

Haha Yeah the level of sparsity is usually a reflection of how settled or unsettled I am at the time of writing. Thank you Kenneth.

[Anand Sehgal]

I liked the narratives

I get it

now



Salvation owes me

nothing



Symbolism only

passes



for the real

thing

very good :)
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[kublakhan27]

Thanks very much Anand :)

[Jack...]

Steve, whenever I peer into a kaliedescope I see a myriad of colors and shapes and patterns and as I spin the wheel they change, inticing my eyes to want more. When I read your poetry the same effect happens, your words, an ever changing metamorphis of thoughts and ideas fracture light as our eyes and mind absorb all that you have to offer. You my friend are a very talented poet and it is always my pleasure to read your work.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much my friend, I can't tell you how much that means. I can only say that your support, and the support of a few other friends, is what keeps me going most of the time. My confidence would be in the gutter without it.

[Jack...]

Steve, keep your chin up my friend. This stuff happens...especially when you are good. There are so many jealous people out there.

[kublakhan27]

Ah I'm as guilty of jealousy as anyone my friend. It's funny how some writers devote so much time to crafting their own voice, then read someone else and instantly wish they had that voice. Thank you Jack, you're a great friend.

[Pryde Foltz]

And thanks for the moment of zenard.

[Pryde Foltz]

Salvation owes me
nothing

Symbolism only
passes

for the real
thing

when reality is under my
control

I think that sums it up. Brilliant stuff.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you as always for the kind words Pryde.

(Haha Zenard...that's the first time I've heard that one)

[Pryde Foltz]

I know … I coined it. LOL

[kublakhan27]

LOL I like that one ;)

[Pryde Foltz]

Or should I say I cohened it. Okay, I'll stop now.