THEN FALL, CAESAR

THEN FALL, CAESAR

A Poem by kublakhan27
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My cronies were adept
at running on repentant swords

I preferred my infamy
in run-on sentences
of third-person propaganda
Even in the wet-backed wheeze
of my final breath
I retained the discipline
to do my kin proud
and turn around to
say goodbye to myself

I required no muse
to compose an immortality
assuring elegy
yet I cannot shirk a nod of gratitude
for how you dangled the phonetic
mastery of this identity
over noble Brutus

Only suicide allowed
a reinstatement of nobility
to the one who introduced himself
with a Brute syllable

I was justified to distrust
the one who thought too much
Such men devour the cerebrum of
the noble herd made content by
swallowing the spirits of assumed
good intentions

© 2014 kublakhan27


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"Et tu Brutus??".... what a betrayal! ! Still he stayed strong. "Noble brutus".. dripping with sarcasm. :p.. well this was a piece in which you have writren expertly about how Caesar felt. As a hero you have portrayed his reaction on his betrayal... he will not let heads of his kin be low at any cost but the betrayal by "brute brutus" led to his ultimatte downfall... :) something new something refreshing

~Sophy

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Haha I've only read that one once, I'm too absorbed in the tragedies ;) I guess Midsummer Night woul.. read more
Sophy Freebirds

7 Years Ago

God!! Steve do yourself a favour.. read comedies :p..... i would love to see your new version.. lol
kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Haha I've read many of them, I just don't get the same creative inspiration from them...I have a har.. read more


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You know full well I'm not a Shakespeare buff, but you don't have to be to enjoy this amazing write. I feel the betrayal but also read survival here. As poets, we raise our s/words and carry on....I love how you said goodbye to yourself, that's priceless...and this was my favorite Dali. ;-)

I required no muse
to compose an immortality
assuring elegy
yet I cannot shirk a nod of gratitude
for how you dangled the phonetic
mastery of this identity
over noble Brutus

Sounds like the best kind of revenge to me....prodigious in its historic value and intent, and the way you charmed me into reading faux Shakespeare (I like yours muchly better) and enjoying it nonetheless! Bravo, standing ovation Steve.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Haha Grinning big-time here Mrs.R ;) I knew I'd have to write it so that it would be accessible to e.. read more
Simply amazing write. Awesome job. :-D

Kaze~

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much Kaze :D
♔ CrownedDevil ☾

7 Years Ago

Your very welcome. :-D
great play on words here, steve...

masterful use of Roman history and semantics..."render unto caesar what is caesar's and render unto the grammar gods what is theirs"
jacob

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Haha Love the paraphrased citation my friend...it is paraphrased I think? If not, my bad :)
<.. read more
jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

yes, paraphrased from the play with a little of me added...
This is fantastic. I remember reading the play in junior high. Stanzas 3 and 4 are my favorites. It is an immortal final utterance.

Excellent work my friend and very appropriate for today. You also get bonus points for the cover pic. :)

-Caradoc

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Caradoc

7 Years Ago

I'd say you did it very well.
Caradoc

7 Years Ago

Read this again. I love this piece. Adding it to my favorites. :)
kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

A million thanks my friend...your support is invaluable :)
Loved the structure here, great details, and awesome finish!
I thoroughly enjoyed your work and ideas within this poem. Wonderful piece my friend...

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much A...truth be told, I wish I had more time to work with this, but it's my favourite pl.. read more
A. Amos

7 Years Ago

I think you did great my and blue oyster cult are truly amazing, so the whole experience was cool an.. read more

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Tags: julius, caesar, brutus, cassius, shakespeare, stabbed in the back, assassination, ides of march, vain, megalomaniacal

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kublakhan27

Nova Scotia, Canada



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