THROUGH WITH KEEPING SCORE

THROUGH WITH KEEPING SCORE

A Poem by kublakhan27
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Soft shelter
I urge your preternatural
brigades of perspective
to ground my resignation
in some hypothetical
formation of inclined leisure
If I'm treading mere chance
in my hope then I urge you
not to simply humour me with
sly tomorrows assuring
optimism in the brittle molts
of days shrinking to reveal
solar aspirations
I'll turn my back
to the broken weather like
a naked sibling
There is nothing humourous
in humouring
though I've taken it
in self-destructive perpetuity
Tie me to the rack of realism
like Odysseus before the Sirens
I'll sigh and swallow
yet another new medication
one for soft shelter
in compounded sleep
where perspectives hide
and the chemicals of moods
long dismantled
congregate behind blindfolds of
destiny's clumsy executioners

© 2014 kublakhan27


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Pax
excellent as always my good friend... I am always in doubt or my thought just somewhat speechless in such profound way you write... or perhaps I could imagine many scenario in my head, still i can grasp your meaning, haha, it is just me though. :D now I can only say: you don't have to keep score in everything just enjoy the ride, and everything else will follow :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Haha I'm slowly learning to enjoy that ride...maybe I'll get it out of my system if I write enough o.. read more
Pax

7 Years Ago

lol, write more my friend, it is good for the soul. And you are most welcome... so glad I came by..... read more



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in compounded sleep
where perspectives hide
and the chemicals of moods
long dismantled
congregate behind blindfolds of
destiny's clumsy executioners

A bit of a masterpiece here, Steve.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much Pryde, I am humbled.
"I may find peace within the emptiness"

I truly enjoyed this wonderful write. You are a master of words and their arrangement. I solute you dear, sir! Bravo...

Posted 7 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

You humble me with your kind words my friend...thank you so much :)
My interpretation is that someone really pissed you off and tried to tell you how to feel about your life when they don`t know the half of it.
"If I'm treading mere chance
in my hope then I urge you
not to simply humour me with
sly tomorrows assuring
optimism in the brittle molts"

I love these lines.

Great pinning. i know what it feels like for someone to try to tell me how i should be, or advise me with their naivety. K

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

As much as I hate to admit it, I am a relatively easy person to piss off...I took a break from thing.. read more
Kleio13

7 Years Ago

I feel you on that. And I have been secluded for a while; being distracted by everyday life is morbi.. read more
Broken promises..broken ties..lack of trust...
Your talent shines in this melancholy little gem...so many brilliant lines and metaphors.
Another one for my library. You are amazing.

:) Julie

Posted 7 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much my friend, I can't tell you how much your words mean to me here...you've made me smil.. read more
MsJewel

7 Years Ago

I'm so sorry to hear that - It is wonderful to see you. You've been missed :)
Hey, Kubbie... thanks for telling me there's a drowning-in-progress near the sand volley ball match-in-progress. However, I think you know that I can't swim. But, though it is probably little comfort, there will be another day (as long as someone, somewhere observes it.) I think what you may/may not realize is that the weather is pleasant and the water where you flounder about (in such dramatic zeal -- love it!) is only half your stature. Rise up, walk onto the beach and receive your Charlie for Best Actor in a category yet to be named. There, just beyond the refreshment stand, they queue for the cliff-notes and translations; even though there is suspicion that none will be forthcoming. Courage, mon ami. I see your clothes are nearly dry.

100 humorless humorings

Posted 7 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

No need to worry, I can't swim either my friend...then again, it sounds like that was what I was try.. read more
Broken promises slowly chip away at the recipient's/
Hopeful heart.

Love the sardonic tone of this amazing write...
With the subtle wistful, (not to mention mythological
Reference) your words weaved throughout this poem.
Oh and Tool?! ^_°

Another incredible poem...compelling in its clarity.

Thank you for sharing,Mr. Steve :)))

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Well first off, I knew you would enjoy the musical accompaniment ;) This may have been the trigger .. read more
ms. barrie

7 Years Ago

You're very welcome, Mr. Steve...And I as well am truly
Honored and humbled by your kindness,.. read more
Always awesome experience to read you my dear Poet. Loved it.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much for the kind words my friend, they truly mean a lot :)
An excellent poem as ever KK.Why do people make promises they can't keep .It would be kinder just to tell us plain and get it over with.I felt this one my friend :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

So glad you were able to feel this one my friend...it's a personal piece needless to say, so it's a .. read more
Vidya Bacchus

7 Years Ago

You are welcome and welcome back I haven't seen you a while.I hope all is well :)
don't promise me what don't plan to deliver...if you love me, fine...but don't humor me just to not hurt me...it will hurt worse later when you leave..."treading mere chance"---"chemicals of moods/long dismantled"

you have such a way of expression..."nothing humorous in humoring" so true...

i need realism, not false hope.

excellent work here.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much Jacob, for reading and understanding...in the past I probably would have preferred th.. read more
Amazing write, I loved reading it. :-) nicely penned.

Kaze~ :-)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

So glad you enjoyed this one, thank you Kaze :)
♔ CrownedDevil ☾

7 Years Ago

Your very welcome. :-)

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Tags: hope, sleep, realism, perspective, humour, destiny, moods, self-destructive, shelter, resignation

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