THROUGH WITH KEEPING SCORE

05 24 14

Soft shelter
I urge your preternatural
brigades of perspective
to ground my resignation
in some hypothetical
formation of inclined leisure
If I'm treading mere chance
in my hope then I urge you
not to simply humour me with
sly tomorrows assuring
optimism in the brittle molts
of days shrinking to reveal
solar aspirations
I'll turn my back
to the broken weather like
a naked sibling
There is nothing humourous
in humouring
though I've taken it
in self-destructive perpetuity
Tie me to the rack of realism
like Odysseus before the Sirens
I'll sigh and swallow
yet another new medication
one for soft shelter
in compounded sleep
where perspectives hide
and the chemicals of moods
long dismantled
congregate behind blindfolds of
destiny's clumsy executioners

Author's Note

Reviews

[Pax]

excellent as always my good friend... I am always in doubt or my thought just somewhat speechless in such profound way you write... or perhaps I could imagine many scenario in my head, still i can grasp your meaning, haha, it is just me though. :D now I can only say: you don't have to keep score in everything just enjoy the ride, and everything else will follow :)

[kublakhan27]

Haha I'm slowly learning to enjoy that ride...maybe I'll get it out of my system if I write enough of these...thank you as always my friend :)

[Pax]

lol, write more my friend, it is good for the soul. And you are most welcome... so glad I came by... :D

typo - I meant I can't grasp your pure intent sometimes... :)

[Pryde Foltz]

in compounded sleep
where perspectives hide
and the chemicals of moods
long dismantled
congregate behind blindfolds of
destiny's clumsy executioners

A bit of a masterpiece here, Steve.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Pryde, I am humbled.

[Chris Micha]

"I may find peace within the emptiness"

I truly enjoyed this wonderful write. You are a master of words and their arrangement. I solute you dear, sir! Bravo...

[kublakhan27]

You humble me with your kind words my friend...thank you so much :)

[Kleio13]

My interpretation is that someone really pissed you off and tried to tell you how to feel about your life when they don`t know the half of it.
"If I'm treading mere chance
in my hope then I urge you
not to simply humour me with
sly tomorrows assuring
optimism in the brittle molts"

I love these lines.

Great pinning. i know what it feels like for someone to try to tell me how i should be, or advise me with their naivety. K

[kublakhan27]

As much as I hate to admit it, I am a relatively easy person to piss off...I took a break from things not long after writing this and I can't help wondering if I shocked myself into seclusion with it...then again, it doesn't take much to send me into seclusion either. You always know where I'm coming from and that means a lot...thank you my friend.

[Kleio13]

I feel you on that. And I have been secluded for a while; being distracted by everyday life is morbid and not inspiring at all, except with the goals that I have . I havent been able to write.

[MsJewel]

Broken promises..broken ties..lack of trust...
Your talent shines in this melancholy little gem...so many brilliant lines and metaphors.
Another one for my library. You are amazing.

:) Julie

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much my friend, I can't tell you how much your words mean to me here...you've made me smile at a time where I haven't been doing much of it :)

[MsJewel]

I'm so sorry to hear that - It is wonderful to see you. You've been missed :)

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

Hey, Kubbie... thanks for telling me there's a drowning-in-progress near the sand volley ball match-in-progress. However, I think you know that I can't swim. But, though it is probably little comfort, there will be another day (as long as someone, somewhere observes it.) I think what you may/may not realize is that the weather is pleasant and the water where you flounder about (in such dramatic zeal -- love it!) is only half your stature. Rise up, walk onto the beach and receive your Charlie for Best Actor in a category yet to be named. There, just beyond the refreshment stand, they queue for the cliff-notes and translations; even though there is suspicion that none will be forthcoming. Courage, mon ami. I see your clothes are nearly dry.

100 humorless humorings

[kublakhan27]

No need to worry, I can't swim either my friend...then again, it sounds like that was what I was trying to say huh :P I've lived a life of acting and it gets exhausting sometimes...I needed to get out of my own skin for a while...thank you as always for your unique insights my friend.

[ms. barrie]

Broken promises slowly chip away at the recipient's/
Hopeful heart.

Love the sardonic tone of this amazing write...
With the subtle wistful, (not to mention mythological
Reference) your words weaved throughout this poem.
Oh and Tool?! ^_°

Another incredible poem...compelling in its clarity.

Thank you for sharing,Mr. Steve :)))

[kublakhan27]

Well first off, I knew you would enjoy the musical accompaniment ;) This may have been the trigger that led me to the hiatus I've taken and I must now take a deep breath and attempt to re-enter the scene...what can I say, I don't need to tell you how humbled and honoured I am by your friendship...it keeps me going when I wonder if I have it in me to do so...thanks so much Miss Barrie, for everything :)))

[ms. barrie]

You're very welcome, Mr. Steve...And I as well am truly
Honored and humbled by your kindness, friendship and your
Encouragement.

Actually I never heard this song by tool...till now, but I noticed tool
And my eyebrow raised up. I felt this write in the marrow of
My bones. It's always a pleasure to read your art. Though I'm always
Slow on the uptake. Be well, my friend! :)))))

[Saddam]

Always awesome experience to read you my dear Poet. Loved it.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much for the kind words my friend, they truly mean a lot :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

An excellent poem as ever KK.Why do people make promises they can't keep .It would be kinder just to tell us plain and get it over with.I felt this one my friend :)

[kublakhan27]

So glad you were able to feel this one my friend...it's a personal piece needless to say, so it's a relief of sorts to know that someone understands...thanks so much :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome and welcome back I haven't seen you a while.I hope all is well :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

don't promise me what don't plan to deliver...if you love me, fine...but don't humor me just to not hurt me...it will hurt worse later when you leave..."treading mere chance"---"chemicals of moods/long dismantled"

you have such a way of expression..."nothing humorous in humoring" so true...

i need realism, not false hope.

excellent work here.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Jacob, for reading and understanding...in the past I probably would have preferred the humouring...it took me a while to realize how harmful that was, but I've come to grips with realism slowly but surely.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Amazing write, I loved reading it. :-) nicely penned.

Kaze~ :-)

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed this one, thank you Kaze :)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. :-)