EXCEPT FOR

11 14 01

Dead weight
clamping down like a shadow
without prejudice

I am dead weight
except for the fault line
furrowing through my brain's
allocating swirls
That's where my initiatives
huddle like autumn-butchered leaves
in a gutter

Please spare me of
another branch of time to kill
except for the one that keeps it
Then I'll take the nagging
Machiavellian
business of memories
down with it

Author's Note

Written in 2001, tinkered with slightly today...I was such a cute little cynic back then...

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

i see this is an early one for you .. its very powerful i think ... inside a duplicit mind ..aaaaargh! like a giant spider has spun it full of thick sticky webs .. good luck unraveling .. eeeyow! .. enjoyed your poem very much .. its a brain teaser for sure and vivid descriptive word choices .. nice one kubla!
E.

[kublakhan27]

It is an early one indeed but I wonder if anyone would have even noticed if I hadn't mentioned it...I don't feel or write much different than I did back then, at least I don't think...this was around the time my poetic voice was starting to take shape...glad you enjoyed it my friend :)

[Matching Socks]

I had to read this one twice, very cleverly worded.
I can almost see the fault line in there, in your wrinkly pink fleshy brain...
I just need to get a leaf blower in there to make all those brilliant ideas fly to life.
Dead weight? not taking the bait...

[kublakhan27]

Haha Love this review my friend...I do appreciate the kind words muchly :)

[Matching Socks]

Anytime, dahling, anytime. :-)

[kublakhan27]

;) (Am I at ten characters yet...?)

[Matching Socks]

No. You gotta throw some kisses and hugs in there. It's all good right?

[kublakhan27]

xoxoxoxoxo :)

[Matching Socks]

Made my night!

[kublakhan27]

Now I'm at a loss for words haha I'm happy that I did :)

[Matching Socks]

L.

(It's just a laugh... Not out loud, kids are in bed)

[kublakhan27]

Haha No problem, I'm just shy like that ;P

[Matching Socks]

I'm just cool like dat...

[Frieda P]

... wrinkly pink fleshy brain...ha there's gotta be a poem in there somewhere

[Matching Socks]

Good thing I said brain right? Am I Right?
You know it...

[Frieda P]

I'm not touching that...not a word....

[Matching Socks]

Probably wise, this one is a family show...

[Frieda P]

Where are the parental controls.........?

[Matching Socks]

Ummmm, I guess that would be ME, keeping my mouth shut on a PG page...
:-)

[kublakhan27]

LOL Yes a brain...thanks for thinking of that though Mrs.R ;)

[redzone]

The Parent has arrived.. but the damage is done.. play nice kiddies..er.. Steve, if those two found the wrinkle, you are in big trouble.. RUN!!! HIDE!!!! QUICKLY!!

[Matching Socks]

I'm gonna pin it all on Frieda since she's not here. :-)

[kublakhan27]

Haha Yes red, girl power is coming to get me ;P

[Frieda P]

Nice Ance! :P

[Lyn Anderson]

This is an outstanding poem. I especially like the autumn leaves line. If you notice, I rarely quote lines in a review, I feel it's like a "spoiler" -- better to let them see it for themselves.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much KL, I'm always grateful for your kind words. I'm the same, I never feel right pointing out 'favourite' parts.

[Frieda P]

Right off I'm hysterical at the graphic....I don't know if I can read this in a serious mode or not now....

I'll take the nagging
Machiavellian
business of memories
down with it

That in itself was a poem, the rest was icing on the cake, vanilla I presume? ;)

Without prejudice, I'm not so sure about that, clever Dali, as always......!

[kublakhan27]

Haha I guess I felt the need to lighten it up a bit Mrs.R...it's still the same old Benji though isn't it? ;) On most days I would most certainly not feel the need to lighten it up, maybe the vodka's still in my system haha I love that graphic, I even remember the exact cartoon it's from...it took a while to find a pic of it too haha So glad you enjoyed it love :) xo

[Frieda P]

I think you've sent that to me already, still funny....you're a lightweight Benji :) I meant my pleasure hon! xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha I'm 120 lbs on a good day Mrs.R, I'm a no-weight ;)

[willweb]

Your poetry is always like a puzzle to me Kublakhan27. I turn all of the pieces face up, start with the borders and then fill in the middle and what a wild picture I find when putting in the final piece. Dead weight, I think not. Worth the wait...yes. I really enjoyed this today.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks as always for the support will, I greatly appreciate it.