DISPOSITION BREEDS OBSESSION

DISPOSITION BREEDS OBSESSION

A Poem by kublakhan27
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08 07 14

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Those old dispositions elevate
like welts on my night's
hypothetical indifference
emotional beneath a crust
of frailty like onion skin
I immerse sullen in a monotone
of moods and I wonder which
of them will play the role
of sentimental foil
to my dogged antiheroism

I wish I could roll this
mental haggis of obsessions
into a stone-laced snowball
and kill the matador
window feeding me
the red cartwheeling matter  
of fulfilled attention
and maybe take out some of
those who know me by my nickname
which is not Norm

© 2014 kublakhan27


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You know you might try a balm or something for those welts on your 'hypothetical indifference', nothing worse than indifference in my book....you've been a little less abstract lately, or I can just read 'dali' now....

I have to tell you 'mental haggis' certainly got my attention, that stuff is so disgusting, so eww what imagery here. You know I'm gonna be calling you Norm from time to time now. ;) This one was a bit more subdued, as if you whispered it in hushed tones of antagonism.

Wouldn't you like to get away where everybody knows your name? ha ha Norm....at least your husband doesn't want to be a girl...ya know, just saying.... ;) xo


Dogged antiherosim....of your frail onion skin peel... &

100 red cartwheels

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

I was just thinking of you love...I was gonna write and see how you were holding up...

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Wow, another very intelligent and imaginative poem. I guess I was not the only one intrigued by the "mental haggis" bit...but it works!

Posted 9 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

Thanks so much Jennie, I'm glad you enjoyed this one :)
A jambalaya of mental images. :)
Cool write.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Matching Socks

9 Years Ago

Lol. At least you're looking on the bright side. :)
kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

Ha I have no choice really...I'd either be in a monastery or a padded room otherwise ;P
kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

Ha I have no choice really...I'd either be in a monastery or a padded room otherwise ;P
Mental haggis -- that has got to be one of the best lines I have ever heard. As a crazy obsessed trivia nut, I think of Cliff -- love the Cheers reference.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

Haha That was the last image that came to me writing this piece...I had to alter the line to work it.. read more
As always your work is full of wonderful layers of emotional and intellectual wedding cake. Every single line has so much meaning behind it, it is often difficult for me to choose favorites. That being said, here are two that called out to me as I reread it:

hypothetical indifference
emotional beneath a crust

I imagine what you are saying here is that though on the outside you have made yourself out to seem as though you don't care, there will always be an inner world full of emotion. Wonderfully penned my friend.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

You are spot-on my friend, as you always are...one of my favourite songs has always been The Great P.. read more
Ashira Macy

9 Years Ago

I am with you on that my friend. In a way we are all just playing our parts out like a stage play an.. read more
kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

Haha I get it stuck in my head a lot ;P
try as you might to be "indifferent", those who feel as deeply as you do can never accomplish that feat... guess that's where the welts come in... reminding you that you do FEEL and you can't ignore... everyone wants to feel they "belong" and that there is a sense of "community" amongst "friends"....

the sullen, hurt, feelings can creep in when we start to feel the loneliness, and take over... snowball effect of emotions... confusion, anger, pain.... they torment you until you just want to throw it back like the unwanted ball of angst that it is...

very emotional write sir.. it touched me... the flow added to the intensity beautifully...



Posted 9 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

You understand me so well April...I've mentioned this before,but it's no mean feat considering most .. read more
AprilRN1210

9 Years Ago

I can see and relate well my friend... most people don't take the time to "look" that is the differe.. read more
kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

:) ((hugs))
Definitely not the Norm at all.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

You have a great knack for picking up on puns Kenneth...many thanks.
You know you might try a balm or something for those welts on your 'hypothetical indifference', nothing worse than indifference in my book....you've been a little less abstract lately, or I can just read 'dali' now....

I have to tell you 'mental haggis' certainly got my attention, that stuff is so disgusting, so eww what imagery here. You know I'm gonna be calling you Norm from time to time now. ;) This one was a bit more subdued, as if you whispered it in hushed tones of antagonism.

Wouldn't you like to get away where everybody knows your name? ha ha Norm....at least your husband doesn't want to be a girl...ya know, just saying.... ;) xo


Dogged antiherosim....of your frail onion skin peel... &

100 red cartwheels

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

I was just thinking of you love...I was gonna write and see how you were holding up...

.. read more
We are our own worst enemy at times...I can relate well to this piece. The second stanza is my favorite...mental haggis eh?? Love that line. x

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

We can be my friend, though I'm not lacking for enemies these days...I thought this was something yo.. read more
redflutterby

9 Years Ago

I have my own share but grief puts so much into perspective. Those enemies are but dust specs in the.. read more
kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

I understand, I'm trying with all my might to do the same...I'll drop you a line soon...in the meant.. read more

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