DISTANCE

DISTANCE

A Poem by kublakhan27
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People who think that online friendship isn't real, hasn't been around one in a time of tragedy...08 09 14

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Splinters of the past
lodge sadistically into
her haunted skin
planting harsh interrogations
into mortal cul-de-sacs
spinning mentally around
the core of doggedly
immortal milestones
A reality of sordid
trick questions
zap her mourning mind
like tasers of inscrutable
reminders
Closure is a hobbled
incantation handicapping
semblances of fervent prayers
Consolation drowns in remnants
of a crying candle
forced to light the dark
continuum of anniversaries
spread around a palpitating
future like frosting on a toxic cake
or a pen of tears
soaking my resigned deacon
of a distant notebook
blurring any prospect of
comprehending words

A convulsion of dividing
miles mapped inside
the vision of a motion
sickened deckhand
Smiles and embraces
whittled down to an incredulous
scribe of elegies immune
to flight on zephyrs
of a palpable alignment
of the presences of
mourner and observer

© 2014 kublakhan27


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Very sad and understandable I hope you're
well my friend thank you for sharing.


I have online and long dissentient
friends if I lost them that I was very close
to would be very hard some I've never meet
wish I could .

Blessings. Benita/ kindred poet

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

5 Years Ago

I understand what you mean wholeheartedly Benita...so glad you enjoyed this one, thank you as always.. read more
Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet

5 Years Ago

you're welcome. thank you for sharing was a pleasure. Blessings. Benita/ kindred poet



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How exquisite! I declare your mind makes word connections that mine never would and I admire that...but somehow it always works. Ah well, I have a lot to learn about poetry, and this is a great lesson.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

5 Years Ago

You sell yourself short my friend...I assure you that your poetry is among some of my favourite on t.. read more
Jennie Baron

5 Years Ago

You are definitely right about the nature of a poet's life. And I appreciate your compliments. Aga.. read more
I know exactly who this is for and I am sure she will appreciate it when she reads it. I am happy you have her as a friend Steve. Always good to have someone who keeps you in check.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

5 Years Ago

Always remember that you are a dear friend of mine as well Noodlebop, and I'm happy and blessed to h.. read more
s y e

5 Years Ago

No need to worry, I am just peachy and same goes for you Steve.
i think i have a strong idea to whom this is written...and there is much value in online friendship...
over the years i have developed intense friendships with three or four people now..many years we have been so close yet never met in person...but we feel each other's love, and joy and pain.

as you express so well here...the cul de sac line got to me, especially...i live way out in the woods, on a cul de sac....it can be both peaceful and lonely at the same time.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

5 Years Ago

I've written several poem addressed to her...she's my dearest friend, I'm sure you know who it is..... read more
jacob erin-cilberto

5 Years Ago

yes, i believe i know....
Very sad and understandable I hope you're
well my friend thank you for sharing.


I have online and long dissentient
friends if I lost them that I was very close
to would be very hard some I've never meet
wish I could .

Blessings. Benita/ kindred poet

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

5 Years Ago

I understand what you mean wholeheartedly Benita...so glad you enjoyed this one, thank you as always.. read more
Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet

5 Years Ago

you're welcome. thank you for sharing was a pleasure. Blessings. Benita/ kindred poet
A verbose leg thrombosis...an infarction that leads to decimation...wonderful.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

5 Years Ago

Glad you enjoyed this one Kenneth, it's a pretty personal one.
Finally been able to read this poem Steve.... truly amazing and in it lies a heart of gold for writing and a heart of the one it is written for... deep respect for the words and feeling you convey and know that it has touched a deep vein in her... online or live, distant or up close, friendships are the most important things we can have and cherish, they make our lives worthwhile... truly!!!
~~redzone

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

5 Years Ago

You humble me with your kind words my friend, and I couldn't agree more...being an introverted and s.. read more
redzone

5 Years Ago

It has spoken and soo well.. she truly is as you say, someone with a huge heart that lifts up everyo.. read more
The distance in a sorrow as this is never close enough to bring it home to the heart of the ones who mourn, and as you so eloquently describe the sorrow, the pain, the "whys" of it all for this dear, dear friend who is hurting so intently for the loss of the dear soul she ever longs to see again. Steve, I know how much you two mean to one another and you have just put another exclamation point to this fact of "distance" between you that is so very close!
Beautiful, expressed with compassion and understanding to express feelings of supreme caring!!!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

5 Years Ago

I'm so glad that this one resonated with you my friend...it was not an easy write, but all of my hea.. read more
Start by saying thankyou this kind of writing for me is addictive. Not only have I indulged on the feeling that your words emanate I have been convinced to think that you are right. Of what? Irrelevant. But why? Irrelevant. Is there any truth to be found? Maybe, maybe not in fact you would be decoding dna for all I know but the beauty of the expression for me in your writing is that it has escaped the material environment.
No, what we must have is more Nuance, Colour is forbidden, only Nuance! Nuance alone writes the harmonies, Of dream and dream, There is no theory. You merely have to read /listen. Pleasure is the law.

Thankyou

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

5 Years Ago

Thanks so much for the insightful review my friend...I don't know if the truth will ever be found, i.. read more
Honestly, this poem made me cry... Today, I was just going to try to figure out how this website worked, since I'm new to this, but I ended up reading many writers' creations, including yours, and they are truly amazing work.

I'm not a very dramatic person, so I don't get teary over sad things easily, but today, 2 poems including yours and AprilRN1210's poetry, so far, made me cry.

Your poem was truly touching. IT reached my heart and I will remember this poem for a while.

So thank you for this amazing piece, and I hope you keep writing :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lacie Blackwood

5 Years Ago

You're welcome :)
And thank you for welcoming me :)

I actually just began my firs.. read more
AprilRN1210

5 Years Ago

I agree with my friend here.. we are a close group of friends who I adore... and I am sorry if I mad.. read more
Lacie Blackwood

5 Years Ago

Thank you guys. You both are very supportive and are giving me a lot of confidence.
Thank you.. read more
Boy, do you have words! haha

This partcularly stood out as I was thinking about this today: "Closure is a hobbled
incantation handicapping
semblances of fervent prayers"

Really good way of portraying things that end with words/externally but not on the inside.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

5 Years Ago

Thanks so much Frontier...needless to say this is a personal piece, for a friend who was feeling dow.. read more

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