BUT OF WANT

BUT OF WANT

A Poem by kublakhan27
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08 28 14

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The final thing
I ever wished to do
I have done
Not on grounds of fear
or fulfillment
but of want
Maybe you should
disregard the future
while it's safe
I'm already frozen
to the vapid verdict
of a chance
immunity to fate
Still you did
the best you could
to define me
in judicious riddles
of compassion
Answers I retain
like a practicing Yoda
for a baffled day
of comprehension

© 2014 kublakhan27


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Author's Note

kublakhan27
Write drunk. Edit sober. - Hemingway

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Write drunk - Great never edit make friends that out of love will make you find the editing. It is very difficult for me to read this and not have my Mom (No I do not have oedipus Complex just in case some of you clever ones...) "I want never gets" she used to say. Sure it fitted in that context. But also fitting is the metaphor of two Bhuddist monks that never choose to be monks as they do and from all form od Bhuddist they land on Zen not sure if that's a blessing or a curse. Too late to choose though someone already choose for them. To ponder and to fragment experiences and to wait for answer that my or may not feel right I see more as a form of communication as I said your friends, the ones that are willing to show love will help you .

Very focused writing this

Thankyou

Posted 7 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Thank you Rene, my friends basically are my answers, they're the only reason I know anything...glad .. read more



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This is very deep and thought provoking. I enjoyed the read very much. One thing I would recommend is to add in punctuation. It would signify significant pauses needed in the peace for rhythmic purposes. Thank you for sharing!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

So glad you enjoyed it PL...most of my poems are broken into stanzas, but for this one I wanted a bi.. read more
I prefer to write while I have had little sleep. I find I write really good poetry while lost in the we hours of the morning, eyes peeling back like a skinned naked rabbit. Very well done friend.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Oh same here, the lion's share of my writing, and pretty much all the best-received stuff, is writte.. read more
realmwriter

7 Years Ago

You're very welcome
Define, yes the riddle you did fine Hemingway, drunk or Knot, too bad you died before the wine came of age.Yoda you might of liked him ,drunk.Judicious the moving river of law, is now a raft of apathy, Kublakhan 27 is "in with the young out with the old" a regular Avett Brother.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much lee, I enjoyed your review.
Write drunk - Great never edit make friends that out of love will make you find the editing. It is very difficult for me to read this and not have my Mom (No I do not have oedipus Complex just in case some of you clever ones...) "I want never gets" she used to say. Sure it fitted in that context. But also fitting is the metaphor of two Bhuddist monks that never choose to be monks as they do and from all form od Bhuddist they land on Zen not sure if that's a blessing or a curse. Too late to choose though someone already choose for them. To ponder and to fragment experiences and to wait for answer that my or may not feel right I see more as a form of communication as I said your friends, the ones that are willing to show love will help you .

Very focused writing this

Thankyou

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Thank you Rene, my friends basically are my answers, they're the only reason I know anything...glad .. read more
liked your play on the opposite word meanings, it always works:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much Fate :)
I really enjoy the way you write sir. I find it in complete contrast to the way i tend to operate, but it is so damn intriguing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much my friend, we do have different styles, but I equally intrigued and always captivated.. read more
I like the way your mind works...(even drunk)..you weave words like no other. So many brilliant lines..
Still you did
the best you could
to define me
in judicious riddles
of compassion
Which is quite thought provoking...do we really wish to be defined?
Another masterpiece from your pen.

:) Julie


Posted 7 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

I think I confuse definition with identity a lot (especially when I've drank a bit apparently haha) .. read more
There's a place where you can get a chance
And we have to do what ever happeneds when
The clock strikes 12 midnight!


Johnsonbobby

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Very true...thank you Johnson :)
Intoxicating... utterly wonderful piece. Love the authors note as well!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Haha The note says it all...so glad you enjoyed it Melliflower :)
Haha … laughing at the author's note. Some really brilliant lines in this one, Steve. A little different from your usual style but very effective. But stay sober;) Well most of the time.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Haha It's funny how one of my most straightforward works seem to be one of the deepest...and trust m.. read more

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