BUT OF WANT

08 28 14

The final thing
I ever wished to do
I have done
Not on grounds of fear
or fulfillment
but of want
Maybe you should
disregard the future
while it's safe
I'm already frozen
to the vapid verdict
of a chance
immunity to fate
Still you did
the best you could
to define me
in judicious riddles
of compassion
Answers I retain
like a practicing Yoda
for a baffled day
of comprehension

Author's Note

Write drunk. Edit sober. - Hemingway

captcha: flipper

Reviews

[Rene Salinas]

Write drunk - Great never edit make friends that out of love will make you find the editing. It is very difficult for me to read this and not have my Mom (No I do not have oedipus Complex just in case some of you clever ones...) "I want never gets" she used to say. Sure it fitted in that context. But also fitting is the metaphor of two Bhuddist monks that never choose to be monks as they do and from all form od Bhuddist they land on Zen not sure if that's a blessing or a curse. Too late to choose though someone already choose for them. To ponder and to fragment experiences and to wait for answer that my or may not feel right I see more as a form of communication as I said your friends, the ones that are willing to show love will help you .

Very focused writing this

Thankyou

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Rene, my friends basically are my answers, they're the only reason I know anything...glad you enjoyed this one.

[Lyn Anderson]

I get the feeling of being good at something, but feeling like you have not accomplished what you would like to, or maybe what you perceive society suspects. The whole exist vs live -- nice write, as always.

[kublakhan27]

You've summed it up perfectly my friend...so glad you enjoyed this one.

[Lyn Anderson]

There isn't much of yours I don't like, although I prefer the strange clinical sexy writes ...

[Kelly Scheppers]

I have more problems with those "captchas" ...perhaps I should try posting drunk, see if I stand a better chance at it!

The thought of someone "defining me" actually scared the living daylights out of me...but I like what you've done here, Steve.

[kublakhan27]

Haha They're usually gibberish to me...I rarely get those witty ones that some people seem to get all the time :P Mind you, if I have to be feeling like I was when I posted this one, I can live without them...

No, we should definitely not be defined by other people...it scares me as well...but I've also given up on trying to define myself, which isn't necessarily as bad as it sounds...thank you Kelly :)

[Jennie Baron]

My impression of this poem is probably colored by that of the other reviewers. It is all that and possibly more. Thought-provoking, for sure. I've certainly had the feeling of being "alive but not exactly living" or of life passing me by. Fortunately those feelings are very brief. Overall an amazing write!

[kublakhan27]

I get that feeling all too often, though not with the frequency I once did...thank you Jennie, I'm glad that this one spoke to you :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

if only we could live without fear of a last day...do things that we really want to do, not what we think we need to do before we expire...

yes, shades of Yoda here...and maybe a bit of Confucius...

the philosophy of living life for life's sake, not for death's sake.

[kublakhan27]

I'm a more frightened person than I care to admit, though I've gotten a lot of it out of my system...thanks so much Jacob.

[Matching Socks]

If this was a drunk write, I would love to get drunk with you sometime.
Relatable in so many... Full but unfulfilled.
Reminds of that old Howard Jones song that I'm way to young to remember.
You're the fastest runner but you're not allowed to win.
Or the poor rich folk that have all that money can afford yet are still left wanting.
Cheers.

[kublakhan27]

Haha You would not have wanted to be drunk with me when this was written, the hangover felt better :P I'm glad that you could relate to this one, in a manner of speaking of course...thank you Ana :)

[willweb]

This one zig-zagged showing the dilema of an acomplishment without feeling acomplished. That is just how I saw it Kublakhan27. Like life is a contradiction of itself when we are alive but not exactly living. if that makes any sense. I really did enjoy this today. This piece made me think.

[kublakhan27]

I think you're spot-on my friend...I suppose it's the feeling of life passing you by...so glad you enjoyed this one, it came from a deep place...