The last letter

The last letter

A Poem by Kuldeep desai
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In memory of her

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Writing a letter on the ridge of a mountain

Frozen hand shivering even to hold the pen

Cold breeze, infinite thoughts mind is at stake

But still writing just for your sake

 

Emptiness is so desperate to give me no words

Surrounded by air of melancholy that’s absurd

Still found and wrote the lines from then to now

Need to say goodbye, but don’t know how

Wind blew so hard letters flew far apart

And I had to write everything from the start

 

There’s a groom waiting for you, grin and agile

Flowers everywhere you walked down the aisle

Seeing you like an angel, realized my big Mistake

This rain of pain is going to stop, I am about

finish this letter

Tear it into pieces after reading once

when the letter is open

Coz whatever I had given to you with love is

always meant to be broken…………….

 

 

 

 

 

 

    

© 2016 Kuldeep desai


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Really excellent work and nice use of the mountain related imagery.

Posted 8 Months Ago


To be honest, I'm not a fan of heartbreak poems becuz it's often a blame game of predictable sentiments. That's why I LOVE your heartbreak poem becuz it's fresh & original & you use the surroundings (jagged & steep) as a symbol for how this feels to the guy, how it feels to have your pages scattered by the wind -- strong relatable imagery! I would suggest line 9, using "pages" instead of "letters" . . . this guy is writing one letter that's made up of pages or sheets of paper, that's what's blowing away. I also love how you show us why the two are separated, but the narrator isn't getting into the blame game, just saying he blew it! The honest, balanced, deeply-felt response of REGRET! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kuldeep desai

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much for the review and feedback....i am glad that you liked it...
This is such a touching poem which wonderfully expresses the melancholy and pain which the heartbroken boy feels. An amazing write! :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


Kuldeep desai

3 Years Ago

Hi it's been so long I still remember writing an poem with you about friendship... I am happy to see.. read more
such a touch letter. i felt every word

Posted 3 Years Ago


oh my goodness I want to bawl my eyes out! ..but theres something about being on a mountain and writing..I wish I could do that!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Kuldeep desai

4 Years Ago

writing in between closed walls and writing in open fresh air has large differences.....an open air .. read more
I like how you penned a story through poetry, very vivid. It took me on a journey of emotion from empathy to concern..I drifted further into the words and got consumed by pain and regret. Love certainly seems like a tug o'war!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Kuldeep desai

4 Years Ago

yeah you are right my friend...Love is certainly a tug of war either you have to pull hard to keep e.. read more
Very sad poem, but heartfelt and with much emotion. A very good piece here, and great lines "Wind blew so hard letters flew far apart
And I had to write everything from the start" loved it.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Kuldeep desai

4 Years Ago

thank you for reading it.........i am glad you have liked it.......
grief and sadness here but the tearing of the letter is a first start to healing, letting go.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Kuldeep desai

4 Years Ago

thank you for reading.....
The last line was soooooo beautiful. To think such a beautiful letter written than teared to shreds. A waste isn't it but even so at least we try to love cause that's all we can do .The poem might be sad but still it's beautiful. Nice poem there Kuldeep keep writing your heart out :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Kuldeep desai

4 Years Ago

this review is more beautiful than my poem.......thank you for loads of sweet words.......Wish you h.. read more
Luna

4 Years Ago

Haha that's nice of you to say :) . But I meant it beautiful poems are only written by beautiful hea.. read more
This is pain,pain in shades.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Kuldeep desai

4 Years Ago

pain in shades...yeah there is a comparative darkness in that pain......

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