Inside Out

Inside Out

A Poem by Kuldeep desai





You want to earn money and be rich,⁣
I want to earn peace and be myself, ⁣ 
But you are outside and i am inside....⁣ ⁣

You don't want to tell people how you feel about them,⁣ 
I want to tell people how much they mean to me 
But you are outside and i am inside....⁣ ⁣ 

You want to show off to others how great you are, ⁣ 
I want to make sure to myself how happy i am, ⁣ 
But you are outside and i am inside... ⁣ ⁣ 

You think you can only be happy with people around but not with yourself, ⁣ 
I think if i am not happy with myself how can i be with others, ⁣ 
But you are outside and i am inside.... ⁣

© 2020 Kuldeep desai


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The first time I saw the "you outside, me inside" line, I thought of it as "outside" = not in the center of someone else's attention or friendship. Later in your poem, I saw this as "outside" = operating upon the outer qualities & not paying attention to the inner qualities. I love writing that conveys multiple possibilities. Beyond the point you make by SHOWING with an example from life, this poem also conveys a deeply rumbling sense of disgust, as if this is meant to be stated nicely, but there's a hidden insult, a hidden put-down. It's becuz you use "you think . . ." this is typical of someone putting someone else down, implying how they think is wrong. So in this way, the narrator is not THAT good of an example of your core message, about operating based on the inner soul of a person . . . someone doing that might be more gentle in delivering harsh observations perhaps? Not a critique of your poem. Your poem is well-expressed for the feeling you convey. I'm just discussing possibilities (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kuldeep desai

1 Year Ago

Hey,
Anyone always writes with one perspective the reader opens up the possibilities.... You .. read more
barleygirl

1 Year Ago

I love how readers show me different ways to understand my own writing!



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Wonderful and amazing poetry shared my friend.
"You don't want to tell people how you feel about them,⁣
I want to tell people how much they mean to me
But you are outside and i am inside....⁣ ⁣"
You shared great wisdom. You can seek wealth or you can seek happiness? Outstanding poetry shared. I did enjoy.
Coyote

Posted 9 Months Ago


Kuldeep desai

2 Weeks Ago

thank you :)
Good profound thoughts and some nice subtle phrasing in the mix.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Kuldeep desai

2 Weeks Ago

thank you very much for your kind words.
very clever lines here the inner dialogue and the outward presentation rarely the two will meet but in the awareness of self... perhaps one day they might make a compromise or two:) I cant help thinking parts of my core may be rotten and best left unexposed for fear of scaring the children LOL

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kuldeep desai

2 Weeks Ago

I come here only when I am feeling low and after a year I am reading your review, All I can say is y.. read more
The first time I saw the "you outside, me inside" line, I thought of it as "outside" = not in the center of someone else's attention or friendship. Later in your poem, I saw this as "outside" = operating upon the outer qualities & not paying attention to the inner qualities. I love writing that conveys multiple possibilities. Beyond the point you make by SHOWING with an example from life, this poem also conveys a deeply rumbling sense of disgust, as if this is meant to be stated nicely, but there's a hidden insult, a hidden put-down. It's becuz you use "you think . . ." this is typical of someone putting someone else down, implying how they think is wrong. So in this way, the narrator is not THAT good of an example of your core message, about operating based on the inner soul of a person . . . someone doing that might be more gentle in delivering harsh observations perhaps? Not a critique of your poem. Your poem is well-expressed for the feeling you convey. I'm just discussing possibilities (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kuldeep desai

1 Year Ago

Hey,
Anyone always writes with one perspective the reader opens up the possibilities.... You .. read more
barleygirl

1 Year Ago

I love how readers show me different ways to understand my own writing!
There is great thoughts poured into this poem. Peace is a greater treasure than material gains in my opinion.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kuldeep desai

1 Year Ago

thank you for stopping by....have a great day... Cheers.... 👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻
The imagery you convey here is simply wonderful. And, yes, inner value is what really matters no matter what your standing in society is.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kuldeep desai

1 Year Ago

thank you for reading......👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻
The binary between the inside and outside is evident in the binary of materialism and spiritualism, the introvert and the sociable. Besides, the choice of the demonstrative picture of the apple is appreciable. And the thing is that binaries get along really well. The last line winds it all up stating that the inside and the outside are different yet incorporated in the same body.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kuldeep desai

1 Year Ago

it felt good reading your view....It was satisfactory..... blessed.....Thank you 👍🏻
It sounds like a clash of values here. If we are attentive and patient, most of us come to value inside more.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kuldeep desai

1 Year Ago

thanks for providing your insight... 👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻
i guess it takes both sides

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kuldeep desai

1 Year Ago

depends on whom we listen.... it takes on that side....
 wordman

1 Year Ago

i suppose so ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
I am not rich nether am I poor, happy with friends there for me. but like time alone,
Tell people what they need to know -

Am I introvert with extrovert tendencies?
or
Extrovert who likes to be alone?
A quandary


Posted 1 Year Ago


Kuldeep desai

1 Year Ago

Thanks for providing your insight.... 👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻

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Added on February 29, 2020
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