Our First Kiss

Our First Kiss

A Story by Kyle
"

It's happened to all of us.

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        Our first KISS 
 
So we have known this for a time A long time 

This innocence This pretending This need

We only know each other innocently Or do we?

We act like it isn't in the air But it's all over the air

We both try to pretend everything is OK 
That we don't really need this to happen

Neither of us want to be the first to risk anything

This need of ours is so mutual But why? 

Why do we both have to pretend the giant pink elephant isn't in the room?

Who has the most to lose? Who wants to make the first move?

Who wants to take the risk to enjoy such pleasure?

Who will it be?

© 2011 Kyle


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Kyle
Mmmmmmmm.

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I like the ramble of thoughts here. My favorite line:

We act like it isn't in the air But it's all over the air

It's amazing the people we meet in life, we all have toyed with making the decision of crossing that line to become lovers.

But the question remains....

Who has the most to lose?

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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"Why do we both have to pretend the giant pink elephant isn't in the room?
Who has the most to lose? Who wants to make the first move?
Who wants to take the risk to enjoy such pleasure?"

Well Kyle, tell the dang elephant to move... **winks**
I enjoyed these random thoughts as they dripped from your ink...
Can't want to read part two.. xo shallimarRose

Posted 6 Years Ago


the words you choose to capitalize are interesting. they bold the essence of the poem. i really enjoyed this.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Well that was a piece to ponder. This says many things, yet doesn't say a word. Some very nice things to ponder wrapped very nicely in air. Well done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


i liked the repetition in the second line. and i liked the ramble of thoughts too haha.
very nice :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


This is such a great poem, loved the ending =)
Wonderful write !

Posted 7 Years Ago


your words overwhelm me..... I think i'll take a first kiss with you=D...lol.. Great Writing!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


i love this i like how you questioned throughout the writing and i love how you just put your thoughts out on screen

Posted 7 Years Ago


Neither of us want to be the first to risk anything

this line is true. I felt like the line of the pink elephant didnt fit. Just my oppinion however. good write. thanks.

Posted 7 Years Ago


I really enjoyed this write, awesome writing

Posted 7 Years Ago


A lot of people can relate to this which makes it so real and fascinating, the beauty behind each word can captivate the reader as they slowly drift off into their own thoughts of that one person they most desire to be held, kissed and loved by. Well done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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