can you hear me

I live without meaning.

Each day my heart hurts more.

does anyone hear my tears.

I give and give until there is nothing to give.

I live in a house without shelter,

can you hear my wants.

I try and stand for he who can not walk

I help who can not help themselves

do I not talk or do you not listen.

I hope for the people who have no hope

I give faith to the people without.

do you hear my dreams.

do you hear my want.

my needs.

can you hear my wants.

can you hear me.

Reviews

[EILEEN McGUINNESS]

A truly inspirational poem which expresses the need to be heard and listened to and not to be ignored or cast aside because of lack of interest or desire.Your poem really touches the senses and within the writing there is a feeling that someone is suffering deep down.

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Almost heartwrenching and emotional piece. Nicely penned. Well done.

~anna rose

[BlackStar]

This should be a poem studied someday. What a powerful and emotional piece. Short and sweet yet full of meaning, pain and talent. well done

[ShaneBerry]

very powerful piece, were have u been man!

[chris-the-writer]

Hey, nice job. I interpreted this as being about someone who, despite the harshness of their own lives, are consistently considering the lives of others.

PROS: It is straightforward, simple, yet provokes exactly what I think you intended it to.

CONS: A Few spelling errors and maybe some "bigger" more elegant words would have touched it up a notch. "Big" words don't make a difference when it comes to the basic purpose and themes of the poem, so this is truly just a suggestion.

Keep it up, and keep writing deep, emotionally provocative works

[An owl on the moon]

You share such a depth, pouring your life into the lives of others.. melting into the meaning and legacy of those who might not have one otherwise... Powerfully vivid and rich with meaning.

[C.smooth]

wow this is good but so depressing

oy!
kiddo, this is pretty damned good.
wow, I'm proud of you.

[Liza]

you are a very insightful person; a very giving and patient person that seems to have met its limit to giving without being returned in acknowledgement, appreciation or thought
i have felt it but you have expressed it clearly, precisely and amazingly.
this was me for many many years....perhaps since the age of 9
i understand it more now
it came from me thinking that everyone else was more important than me
it took about 15 years to understand that i had to open my mouth; make my presence known and no longer stay shut for the comfort of others....
it is about surrounding yourself in an environment that commands two way street flowing traffic - this shelter seems like a dead end....

[Alex W]

Not bad at all, nice piece.

I like the line, "I give faith to the people without." A very good thing for you to do, even if you feel low yourself.

Anyway, kudos on this :-)