tell her

tell her

A Poem by the nothing

please if you see her

tell her I love her

tell her how much I love her

I'm begging you so

I still need her from the bottom of my heart

but I could never tell her

when I look at her picture

I need her more then anything

so if you see her

tell her love love her so

tell her she's welcome home

tell her I my love is undieing

tell her I will never leave her alone

tell I wil follow her to the ends of of the eatrh

just tell her

© 2009 the nothing


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there is lots of emotion in this poem lol! it is very very sweet and would probably be an amazing wedding speech!

Posted 14 Years Ago


wow that is a good poem... I need to write a poem soon.....
i love all the emotion that you put in to it!
ashlyn*

Posted 14 Years Ago


Ahh yes, a poem that mostly every guy can relate to in at least one point in his life. I really liked this piece, I myself could relate to it very, very well. There are a few mistakes though.
"tell her love love her so" You forgot the "I" in there and you put another love there.
"tell her she welcome home" I think you meant "she's" or "she is"?
"tell her I my love is undieing" You put an "I" there, I don't think you meant to?
"tell I wil follow her to the ends of of the eatrh" The "wil" has only one "l", it needs another obviously. And "eatrh", I'm guessing you mean "earth".

Other than those spelling mistakes and such, it was a very good write. Very easy to relate to. Oh and one more thing, just a thought, the line, "tell her I will never leave her alone" seems a bit stalkerish..but if you like it, keep it in there. Overall good write, thanks for sharing.
-Bryce

Posted 14 Years Ago


i luv it i could feel all the emotions...good write:D

~*MariluLUVSYou*~

Posted 14 Years Ago



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the nothing
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A Poem by the nothing