Jesus's Footsteps

Jesus's Footsteps

A Story by ladybug

   I was walking down the beach with my best friend and she turned to me and said'' Do you believe in God?" " To be honest I dont know,'' I replied. "Well I do and I think that you need time to hink about what you believe in, I'm going back to the beach house.''she said. I kept walking as she turned around. I looked up at the sunset and thought to myself'' No man coud make this, and no man could make that,''looking at the sea.I walked a little while and then turned around to go back and I saw two sets of footsteps. As I ran back to he house to tell me friend I thought'' Wow there must be a God out there.

© 2009 ladybug


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So inspiring.
I love your story, I really do.
It showcases the wonder and mystery that is God.
That He would paint the sky to see us believe him...it's amazing.
Again, very beautiful.
I echo the previous suggestions for punctuation, but either way I'd say we all got the message you were trying to convey. *smile*


Posted 13 Years Ago


I'm a Christian and I really enjoyed your story.
hehe just a little grammar error: Jesus's Footprints should be Jesus' Footprints...lol
Yes a little work on punctuatin and it will be perfect!

Posted 13 Years Ago


this is a very nice story! and like Madeline said, it is beautiful! Very meanngful--overall, great. Just please start using punctuation. Sorry-pet peeve. But don't worry about that, this story is amazing. :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


True story? This is beautiful; the coming of God to another soul. Though, I think you should break your story up a little. The dialog is all squished in with the paragraph.
Like this:
_________________________________________________________________________
I was walking down the beach with my best friend and she turned to me and said
''Do you believe in God?"
"To be honest I dont know,'' I replied.
"Well I do and I think that you need time to hink about what you believe in, I'm going back to the beach house.'' she said.
I kept walking as she turned around. I looked up at the sunset and thought to myself
''No man coud make this, and no man could make that,'' looking at the sea. I walked a little while and then turned around to go back and I saw two sets of footsteps. As I ran back to he house to tell me friend I thought
''Wow there must be a God out there."
_____________________________________
And you're forgetting a lot of commas and such in your writing. If you'd like I can tell you more in a message.
Again, This is truly beautiful. I love it. :)
-Madeline



Posted 13 Years Ago



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