I Watched

I watched the sunlight

In your eyes just vanish.

I watched pain take over

And your eyes fill with anguish.

I watched you beg for help,

Laughed painfully as you grew alone.  

I watched as darkness consumed you;

Wept as the demons took control.

I watched as the roses disappeared, 

Replaced by emptiness.

I watched the robbers run,

With a bag filled with your bliss.

I watched you refuse help;

Resort to self harm and self hatred.

I watched you admit repeatedly:
" I'm not going to make it. "

I watched your death happen,

how you smiled before you died.

I watched as you ignored I,

The only voice that gave you strength inside.

Author's Note

This was inspired by the picture I uploaded and the song "The Bad Vibe" by Verbal Surgeon and Danny Dubz.
Enjoy!

One more thing, I am writing this piece to myself. As in, I watched myself die. Ahaha, enjoy.

Reviews

[demureminds]

This gave me chills. Haunting and distressing piece, but you portrayed self-hatred very well here. I'm sure many could relate to this feeling. Great work.

[TurtleClark]

haha i watched mymom die but i dont think i could pu thtta in words

[K-mo]

Very good description, another good poem

[Lost in Wonderland]

Wow, this poem was dark and very sad, th progression and analogies were very well placed. These lines stuck out:
"I watched the robbers run,
With a bag filled with your bliss."
The end was haunting, how the person smiled before death, but through the imagery you provide, we can't help but understand their peace in that moment.
Great write! God bless
--AdarkMay

[Summer'sBreeze]

This is amazing, Tia! A little dark (I don't know why), but full of emotion.
Another great write.

[Thea]

Aw...This was really nicely written...I love the simple rhyme scheme and repetition of "I watched" gave the whole poem an impact...It was great to read another piece from you, Tai...Well done!
:)))