Inside Out

Wrote this pretty fast, not exactly my best work. Muse only whispered tonight and I had to strain to hear her.

Black trees against the grey sky
No moon for us tonight
Artificial illumination
Synthetic melodies delight
Processed cotton insulates our skin
Nights darkness holds us tight
Drowning out this cities mumble
And yet our spark of life ignites
Do you ever wonder
Just how far it could ever go
If we let it die from the outside
And forced this inside Us to grow
No time for retrospection
At least they tell us so
And yet they wonder why we're drowning
When they hold back against the flow

Reviews

[Tiffany K Charles]

it's like matrix for poetry....... i effing love it

[Coyote Poetry]

Many questions are answered by living. Each of us struggled and attempt life. Your poem made me think and ponder what life is and what life should be? I don't going with the flow. Media control world isn't my goal. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Giulia King]

It's amazing! It stands out, don't be so hard on youself. I loved reading it :)

[LapseOfMind]

Oh wow, thank you very much! I appreciate it!

[Ana B.]

hmmm, speculative thought, provoking the system by finally feeling awake from the ''virtual'' sleep. Love the theme of this. Lovely done :)

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much :)

[APOORVA]

superfluous emotions.
liked every bit of it.
my favorite line is : No moon for us tonight


this leaves me amazed

[LapseOfMind]

Oh wow, thank you very much!

[Luna]

A very refreshing and cool piece.
"If we let it die from the outside
And forced this inside Us to grow "
These two lines mention everything to me. I Liked it more than I thought I would. Well done :)

[LapseOfMind]

Well thank you, I'm glad that you enjoyed it!