Storms Passing Through

Storms Passing Through

A Poem by Bright Ocean Star
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It's wet here, and has been for days. It is supposed to continue for several more. I just thought I 'd use it to my creative advantage....

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A Storm is Passing Through…



 

Liquid life pours and pools

Falls and flails amid rattles and fools

Streams of aqua flow downhill

Dripping, slipping, shallow on sluice

Blowing, howling, drip drop drip

Erodes the soil, grass loses its grip

Ping, pong, drip, ting, tong

sings the rhythmic nighttime song

drips pop on the sidewalks

shutters bang against the walls

winds batter concrete doorsteps

branches sway their way along

Storm is passing through this night

Time to stay close to home

keep dry and out of sight

listening to the lulling

harmony of life’s precious light

 

Bright Ocean Star; April 14, 2015

 

© 2015 Bright Ocean Star


Author's Note

Bright Ocean Star
This one came to me in pieces today. I didn't have my notebook, so I tried my best to remember each piece as it came. :)

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I liked your description of the storm.
"Time to stay close to home
keep dry and out of sight
listening to the lulling
harmony of life’s precious light"
I liked the storm. Time for good book or writing. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bright Ocean Star

8 Years Ago

Thank you for checking them out. I'd almost forgotten about this little one. I appreciate you drop.. read more
Coyote Poetry

8 Years Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.



Reviews

I liked your description of the storm.
"Time to stay close to home
keep dry and out of sight
listening to the lulling
harmony of life’s precious light"
I liked the storm. Time for good book or writing. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bright Ocean Star

8 Years Ago

Thank you for checking them out. I'd almost forgotten about this little one. I appreciate you drop.. read more
Coyote Poetry

8 Years Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.
Very cool onomatopoetic composition

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bright Ocean Star

8 Years Ago

Thank you, MamaZ...so happy you enjoyed it. :)
MomzillaNC

8 Years Ago

yvw :D
Such a beautiful tenderness to your words... like a soft rain... that music it creates.. How you capture that so well with your thoughts... the sighing emotions... feeling this moment even now... And realizing storms do pass through... and sunlight comes again.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bright Ocean Star

8 Years Ago

Thank you, C. I'm honored you stopped by to read this one and leave such a kind review. You've jus.. read more
I really like this one. Very fun and playful, with a delightful rhythm. I might take the a out of the line storms a passing, but that may just be personal preference.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bright Ocean Star

8 Years Ago

You're right. It sounds better without it. Thank you for stopping and leaving this helpful comment.. read more
Lyn Anderson

8 Years Ago

Yes I just put up four today -- two of them collections. I am putting off taxes again, lol.
You pieced this together really well...great alliteration used within ..been raining just about everyday here also..I love the rain, but I am so ready for some sunshine..nice work Anne..

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bright Ocean Star

8 Years Ago

Thank you, Fran. I'm happy you enjoyed this one. I was so happy that my muse gave me the lines lik.. read more
  Fran Marie

8 Years Ago

You're so welcome
"Liquid life"....so wonderfully descriptive

Perfect alliteration and internal rhyme to create the feeling in the reader's mind.

Superbly done!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bright Ocean Star

8 Years Ago

Thank you, Rubie! I like playing with the texture of words. It's like verbal sewing pieces of fabr.. read more
You captured the rain beautifully. I love the lolling hypnotic sounds of your onomatopoeias. They are fabulous. Rain can be so lyrical even when it lasts for days. Your words move gracefully as the rain dances all around you.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bright Ocean Star

8 Years Ago

Thank you, Ice! I always love to read your comments. It's nice that you dropped in to read this on.. read more
Woot woot! I am so happy I get to read you again, I have missed you.
This is great, it's funny where out inspiration comes from, isn't it?
I love storms and bad weather but when the sun comes out here, it's truly superb and makes such a difference to people's day!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bright Ocean Star

8 Years Ago

I'm happy you liked this one, Noodlehead. It has been quite awhile since words just popped into my .. read more
i love the contrast of your closing .. i expected the storm to remain .. huddling behind closed shutters in a storm is at once comforting and terrifying .. the home may blow down .. breathing relief that this one did not
E.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bright Ocean Star

8 Years Ago

Yesterday and the day before, it was a soft, slow kind of rain. It just continues to fall. The gras.. read more
Einstein Noodle

8 Years Ago

ahahaha! i so here that Bright one!! and then the sun comes out but the grass is still too wet so al.. read more
Bright Ocean Star

8 Years Ago

precisely. It's becoming a royal pain in the butt! :)
Don't you just hate it when those snippets of ideas and concepts occur to you, and you have to try remember then.
I enjoyed the feel of the sounds in this one, it made me feel like I experienced the weather with you.
Well done.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bright Ocean Star

8 Years Ago

Thank you, Noel. I appreciate you dropping by to leave your supportive comments. You never fail to.. read more

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