woman right woman left

THE WOMAN ON MY SHOULDER

THE ONE UPON MY LEFT

TELLS ME I SHOULD GUARD MY HEART

SHE WANTS ME TO MAKE IT COLDER

SHE TELLS ME TO NOT TO LISTEN TO MY HEART

SHE TELLS ME I WAS NEVER READY

SHE TELLS ME I AM JUST LOOKING FOR DEATH

SHE KEEPS SHOWING ME ALL THE PAIN 

SHE TELLS ME IF YOU NEVER LET THEM IN

THEN YOU WILL NEVER GET HURT

MAYBE SHE IS RIGHT

THAT FEELS REAL 

SHE IS PULLING ME TOWARDS HER

BUT THEN THERE IS A SHOUT FROM THE OTHER SIDE

THE LITTLE WOMAN ON MY RIGHT

CALLING ME TO SHOW ME HOW TO BE HAPPY

SHE TELLS ME SHE WILL KEEP ME SAFE

SHE TELLS ME I WILL HAVE LOVE

SHE TELLS ME I WONT GET HURT

SHE TELLS ME TO LET MY HEART BE WARM

SHE TELLS ME TO NOT LOOSE HOPE

SHE TELLS ME IT WILL CHANGE

SHE TELLS ME TO FEEL THE PAIN TO BECOME HAPPY AT THE END OF THE DAY

SHE TELLS ME TO CRY AND LET IT ALL OUT

THEY BOTH SCREAM CALLING ME TO THEIR SIDES BUT I CAN'T CHOOSE CAUSE I WANT BOTH BUT THERE IS A WAY I DONT HAVE TO CHOOSE 

CLOSE MY EYES AND END IT ALL

LEAVE IT ALL

LEAVE THE HAPPINESS AND PAIN

LEAVE THE CRUEL PEOPLE AND WORLD

LEAVE TE DEPRESSION 

CAUSE THEY BOTH LIED TO ME

THE ONE SAID I WON'T FEEL HURT

THE ONE SAID SAYS I WILL ALWAYS FEEL PAIN

AND IT WAS NOT TRUE CAUSE NO MATTER SIDE I CHOOSE I WOULD NEVER HAVE GOTTEN 100% OF WHAT THEY OFFERED.

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The intention in this piece and the way you split the two thoughts is very effective. The arguments are well made and the feeling of the protagonist being trapped shone through. I disliked the capitalisation and there are several errors in the piece that need crafting.