Buried Alive

The soil piles over me
a hole I can't dig out
Can't move, Can't breathe
though I ache to shout.

When it rains, It pours
body and mud cannot part
It may slow my movement
but never dull my heart.

Darkness surrounds me
but I see a glimpse of light
For that light holds hope
so I continue to fight.

Reviews

[emipoemi]

¡Fan-tás-ti-co! Strong imagery, and very motivational not simply for the self, but anyone in a similar situation (metaphorically or literally). Only note is that Last Stanza Line 3 should begin with "and" rather than "for", for a) you're not exactly explaining point that would require the use of "for" and b) to verify that fact, you begin line 2 with "but" and end that line with "light" to then repeat "light" in line 3..... ergo "and" and not "for". Well done overall!!

[Planet x]

Darkness surrounds me
but I see a glimpse of light
For that light holds hope
so I continue to fight

You are a beautiful writer
Only you can write such amazing words

[Daniel Valentine Rivera]

Having hope even when you're buried alive in the worlds hardships and misfortunes is something to be admired. This poem is bigger in substance than in words. Less is more. Loved it!

[Lauren Nicks]

Thank you so much! Glad you liked it!

[Relic]

Though I feel this is a bit too literal, I do like the optimism you show in the end. Everyone needs hope. We couldn't survive life without it.

[Kesha]

I love the ending, "so I continue to fight" Nicely written

[Lauren Nicks]

Thank you so much!

[Kesha]

You are welcome!

[mercy party]

never dull my heart, good line.

[Lovecraft]

Great poem with a horribly claustrophobic theme prevalent throughout. The font and color goes well hand in hand with this poem.

Also trying to break free of something/someone holding you back (Or holding you done) and trying to prevent you from doing what you want.

Being buried alive is my worst nightmare...

Nice.

[Lauren Nicks]

Thank you! I have been feeling stuck and not really able to move forward lately. Thought that the 'buried alive' theme was quite fitting.

[Lovecraft]

It is, horrifyingly so, lol.