Heaven

My friend dared me to make a dark senryu... here's what I came up with :)

  With one Lustful blade

My sorrows spill to the floor

   and so does my life

Reviews

[A. Amos]

Poignant with so many hidden messages...great write!

[Samuel Pennell]

I really love this. Dark and simple. I love the Japanese tone. And life fades away like cherry blossoms sagging into the wind. Or "sagging in the sun."

Please give my writings a read. I think you'll like this one:

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/samspennell/1221824/

[zainul]

What a meaningful piece!
Love your great expression but feeling sad at what happened to your life.

[Another Poet]

Cool! This was really nice.

[Chris]

When the darkness hides
our inner self remembers
where nightmares come from.

So many people have their own view of what "darkness" is all about. And we can't disagree because who is to say what is and what isn't.