Demons

The demons are

wakening up

Their chains broken

by time

Their vengeance hot

and cold

Fire in their eyes

teeth of ice

So many at

one time

To many to

count correctly

Now I need

to decide

To flee or

FIGHT

The sword rusted

by dust

Now it must

turn ruby

The darkness may

swallow me

For the light

has cast me

OUT

Author's Note

Be honest please

Reviews

[pal]

Well structured and the poem is brief to the point.
Pal

[TheMalady]

I must say that I am left in deep thought after reading your poem. What I could honestly interpret and derived from this is your inner darkness stirring within you, trying to break free. Now, it leaves one person in dread to even think about escaping from it.

Overall, your writing is quite unique. Very thought-provoking. There's nothing I can really say about it, since poem is an expression of one's thoughts and feelings. Great poem! :)

[Aswin R Prasad]

So..I assume this poem is about you trynna fight with you inner demons .. I loved some parts of this poem like where you stressed on the word "FIGHT" and how you described their appearance in the second stanza ! :)
It's a good read and i'm looking forward to read more of your works!

And can i just suggest something real quick..
It'll sound better if you use "The demons are now awakened" instead of "The demons are wakening up".?
And it's just a suggestion.. (You can take or leave it ) :)

Thanks for sharing ! :)