You Had Me At Goodbye

it's become so very obvious

embarrassingly clear

that i am not the one for you

no, i'm not even near

it's time to slit open my heart

make it devoid of you

once it's clean i'll stitch it back

and it'll beat brand new

i'll bathe my brain in herbal tea

dump ice water on my soul

i'll pick your name out from my teeth

and i'll cover the cavernous holes

the tears about you, i'll cry away

i'll wash them down the drain

i'll cleanse my mind with thunderstorms

and pretend i feel no pain

i'll walk with an unfamiliar strut

a new confidence and new vibe

until i remember you again

oh, you had me at 'goodbye'

-l.r.

Reviews

[Relic's Bare Trees]

I'm giving you applause for this. The detail is rich with metaphors that stand out and your attitude shouts with confidence too. The title's play on words grabbed me from the start. Keep writing.

[Lexi Richard]

Thank you! I definitely will continue to write.

[Gedalya]

Great way to say "no want you here no mo". LoL good poem, certain lines resonate even after the first reading.

[Lexi Richard]

Ahah thank you!

[Katie Alexander]

This is fantastic. I saw so many images and it brought me back to my own experiences; a very powerful piece of work(:

[Lexi Richard]

Thank you!

[Rossen]

Sometimes to save yourself you must shed some skin... well done...

[Lexi Richard]

Unfortunately true... Thank you

[Raymond Federle]

This was a fun but emotional read. I enjoyed very much. :)

[Lexi Richard]

Thank you very much!

[I Am Svetlana]

This was simply beautiful :) It's the perfect uplift for someone who has just gone through a break-up. After a break-up, things aren't always easy, we mope around and miss them, but soon after awhile, we begin to see things different, more clearly. To realize that maybe we haven't done anything wrong, but it was all them. We then have to smile to ourselves and remember who we are, hence giving us a new confidence and vibe. We are happier, like such relief had be lifted from our shoulders. We feel free. Happy. Refreshed. New.

[Lexi Richard]

Thank you! Exactly the message I was trying to portray.

[I Am Svetlana]

You're welcome :) I'm always glad to review!

[TheLoneWriter]

I really enjoyed your poem! I think it was a very clever way to describe your feelings and definitely the emotions showed! Great writing!!

[Lexi Richard]

Thank you!

[JenniferMarie]

packed with images that I truly enjoyed.

"it's time to *slit open my heart (prompted and image right away)
make it devoid of you
once it's clean i'll *stitch it back
and it'll beat brand new"

Great verse.

All were filled with great images. Enjoyed this poem very much.

[Lexi Richard]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Cassie]

Awesome, I couldn't write any better than this. good one indeed

[Lexi Richard]

Thank you!

[zainul]

Wonderful!Wonderful!Wonderful!
No more words are suitable for the awesome write.
Congratulations!!!

[Lexi Richard]

Thank you so much!

[zainul]

You are most welcome!